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Into Wilderness
Virgil

The raised roads will crumble down
 1
behind the winding mountains
 2
when I march to nowhere else
 3
without wings, wheels or oars
 4
 
 
The sun will succumb
 5
to infectious twilight
 6
later than usual
 7
and a million years from now
 8
I may be wise
 9
 
 
Clear-cut trees
 10
will stalk the horizon
 11
like unwelcome dreams,
 12
the flaying bark
 13
of their ribs
 14
taken to by the deer
 15
 
 
*        *        *        *        *
 16
 
 
The 9mm on my waist
 17
(my cold eighth chakra)
 18
reminds me
 19
I am still helpless
 20
against grizzly bears
 21
 
 
Passing a cesspool birthing
 22
millions of West-Nile viruses,
 23
I notice a scar of mine
 24
for the first time,
 25
shaped also like a river
 26
 
 
Wild dogs, I suspect
 27
from the camp
 28
in the gullet
 29
of the night,
 30
circled
 31
some trash some truck
 32
vomited out (probably)
 33
on a yesterday:
 34
        -food wrappers
 35
        -headphones with
 36
        -loose ends and a
 37
        -salty chip bag
 38
cementing
 39
their relationship
 40
with snarls and jerks
 41
 
 
They notice me for the first time
 42
and say nothing;
 43
 
 
the engagement is broken.
 44
 
 
*        *        *        *        *
 45
 
 
One of the dogs had an arm
 46
(and center of gravity)
 47
missing
 48
and the other had a piece of ear
 49
left behind at a botched piercing
 50
 
 
They left me there,
 51
alone on the road
 52
while their howls
 53
rattled the sickle-cell moon
 54
 
 
Wanting silence,
 55
I wished
 56
to shoot them both
 57
to quiet each,
 58
whose shouts stabbed
 59
the inside of my crown
 60
like misplaced obelisks...
 61
sadly, .
 62
 
 
On a mushroom-covered log
 63
on a footstep-covered road
 64
I sat down beneath the sky
 65
and refused to cry
 66
when the voices of wolves sang
 67
cold across the taiga -
 68
 
 
just another night on bald mountain
 69

16 Jan 08

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Comments:

Extremely eloquent. Nice
 — themolly

Wow, this is so good!  I really like the way you weave your way through the night, creatures, trash, to the mushroom covered log on the footstep-covered road.

Very nice writing.  
 — Isabelle5

thanks!
 — Virgil

incredible piece.

did you ever watch grizzly man?
good film.
 — varun

only had a problem with 'may' in l9.
the two-sided-ness of it... hmm.
 — varun

i think
it is because of the 'will' in the first line of that strophe.

i thought the 'may' weakened it a little.
 — varun

also, is 'down' in l1 necessary?
i just thought that 'mountains' in the next line would suggest that. no?

also, consider moving 'cold' in l19, to l18, before 9mm?


gullet of the night
is my favourite line. lovely.
 — varun

forgot to rate this.

very nice.
: )
 — fractalcore

thanks`
 — Virgil

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