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Genius Minds
OKcomputer

Their days twice as long;
 1
their hours doubled;
 2
still seems like a minute but its two.
 3
More time to feel sad, more time than the regular guy.
 4
Their brain not bigger but strangely formed.
 5
cradled better, aroused better.
 6
More urgent thoughts than the guy working the same shift
 7
in a different store.
 8
 
 
Can't see ghosts, can't love.
 9
these are the things they understand too much.
 10
Love molecules temporary,
 11
romance a repeat thing
 12
with many different women.
 13
there was nothing special in mom's cookies.
 14
dad was just like every other dad.
 15
the only thing unusual about him
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is that he knows how hard it is,
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how unfair it should rightly be,
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how lonesome he has to feel
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in order to get things right.
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lonesome brings bitter
 21
against the cops. and a deep loving
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for himself.
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everybody hates the genius until he dies.
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criticizes the genius.
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the public picks all of the geniuses
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from the genius tree.
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makes sure he can't be happy,
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feel proud for his hard works.
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it would make the public feel too terrible
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about their shit lives.
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the geniuses are gone.
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they're all dead and long forgotten.
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cops got em all.
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20 Jan 08

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ok what is your drug of choice?
 — unknown

The one that reciprocates love to its user. _\|/_
 — OKcomputer

I am going to edit the hell out of this in a while here. After I wake the fuck up. ::::::::::
 — OKcomputer

likey
 — BoundFeet

wake up all-reddy?

or wake up blew
it all deep-ends on ewe.

[never]mind duh gene-use.
; )
 — fractalcore

i wouldn't edit it, just write more into it and force the hints into the open. the energy is here, it's just dissipated for some reason into being 'reasonable' -- let your genius invent 'reason', or the clones will do it for you.
 — unknown

'Ars longa, vita brevis' -- Poetry as the language only the heart can hear, word-music using both sides of the brain, within but without like a cloud full of thunder, lightening and rain -- word-magic transacted as rhythms, pulses and pause with metaphoric meanings dancing around beauty, the first cause -- genius is the urge of Nature to break through the bonds of mediocrity and sleep-walking in the TV daze -- reality is the medium of the genius and the fulcrum of her changeable way with a pliable brain to that music only she can hear -- indigo child wild in the weirding way learnt to speak about what others can't say
 — AlchemiA

'rationality', even when colored sapphire and emerald, is an aesthetic judgment.
 — unknown

no it isn't but it sounds good.
 — unknown

rationality is always a question of 'this looks right'. you remember, don't you, that you can't find any real point of view which isn't already a part of the object being judged? that you can't know anything outside of the senses, and all the 'standard meters' in the world are simply there because we said they were a 'meter'.
 — unknown

_\|/_
 — Salamander

Thank you Fractalcore, AlchemiA: your comments are beautiful and complement perfectly my artistic aim.

And Unk, thank you for being arbitrary. Have you ever considered becoming a police officer?
 — OKcomputer

it takes genius to find patterns in things.
 — unknown

genius is very common, why do you always have to be different?
 — Rhiannon1984

you work it out...

http://www.poet rycritical.net/read/51241/
 — unknown
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