| SINGULARITis is THE OLD NEW BIRD FLEW
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fractalcore
| staring the whole is nauseating – | 1 |
manic-acrophobic as when | 2 |
one's with clipped wide wings to sport, | 3 |
legs twisted as | 4 |
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Infinity | 5 |
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is a symbol, a curious thing, | 6 |
lies fat, else an 8-footed hen | 7 |
without an option to abort | 8 |
her eggs raging with | 9 |
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urgency | 10 |
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is sobriety for boozing | 12 |
a drop too many, to deaden | 13 |
the active voices that retort | 14 |
to one's muted | 15 |
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passivity | 16 |
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is the good ol' Phoenix passing | 17 |
out and waking up in the barren | 18 |
cold with bold attempts at "rapport" – | 19 |
that word verbalized | 20 |
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badly | 21 |
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is how one deserves a spare wing | 22 |
or more, for lift connotes burden | 23 |
headed t'wards home of just one sort: | 24 |
that old new | 25 |
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Singularity. | 26 |
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written 1/16/08 |
20 Jan 08 |
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the stanzas look like beads on a string, and they're nicely kept together; i like how one key-word is explained through the following stanza metaphorically; i wanted to say i like the first two stanzas mostly, but then, i realized the passivity Phoenix stanza is delicious.. i like also that you wrote again about action/inaction and the idea of one, oneness, soulmates, home.. best symbol, the Infinity. pointing ending. very clever poem.
— nisetru
too many birds these days and i'm quite inspired. thank you so much, nisetru.
— unknown
hope you didn't forget to mispronounce "rapport".
— unknown
!
— unknown
I love birds :)
oh yes, the bird poetry contest, lovely poems i've read around here too.
welp. spring comes soon and there will be even more birds.
— nisetru
i guess birds really are good at rapport, huh?
: )
— fractalcore
those single word lines
when i read them it was like a big booming voice just for that word
also, i repeated each of those words automatically, the booming voice speaking the first and a regular one the second for to start into the next phrase
is that what you figured would happen
— chuckle_s
thanks for reading, chuckle_s.
the one-word lines are parts of the
previous stanzas as this is a metered
piece. the echo, if any, should be sounded
in the head to facilitate contunuity.
hope you didn't forget to mispronounce 'rapport'.
: )
— fractalcore
i pronounced it properly
sorry
didn't take the "s the right way though
in my defense the signifier for the phrase is passivity so there's almost a built-in
desire for silents
nifty!
— chuckle_s
thanks, chuckle_s.
that underscore in your name
indicates some bold moves.
: )
— fractalcore
oh yes, you are bold.
: )
— fractalcore
what do you think, Aziel?
: )
— fractalcore
yoohoo, Aziel...
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— fractalcore
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— fractalcore
have you seen any birds lately?
cheeky me.
: )
— fractalcore
consciousness explained isn't it? the architecture of human mind ....When it is starting to getting wrong, then Einstein had to join space and time to make what is called “space time continuum”. All based on somebody else’s mistakes. It’s all amusing; it sort of works, yeah, sort of... The reason is that they do not know the domain of space time in which their laws are valid. …The whole physics falls into a heap at the bottom in black hole, in a singularity! I liked your exploration... I am in position thanks to the imagination-stretching view of your poem and my experiencing it, to shift my awareness. This is great writing, that's what I need. ivana.
— unknown
thanks to you again, ivana.
i'd really like to see your
poetry posted here
if that's not too
much to
ask.
: )
— fractalcore
boompfh
: )
— fractalcore
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