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staring the whole's nauseating –
manic-acrophobic as when
one's with clipped wide wings to sport,
legs twisted as
is a symbol, a curious thing,
lies fat, else an 8-footed hen
without an option to abort
her eggs raging with
is sobriety for boozing
a drop too many, to deaden
the active voices that retort
to one's muted
is the good ol' Phoenix passing
out and waking up in the barren
cold with bold attempts at "rapport" –
that word verbalized
is how one deserves a spare wing
or more, for lift connotes burden
headed t'wards home of just one sort:
that old new

written 1/16/08

for Diana Jiganie, my nisetru,
bestest friend and soulmate.



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20 Jan 08

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the stanzas look like beads on a string, and they're nicely kept together; i like how one key-word is explained through the following stanza metaphorically; i wanted to say i like the first two stanzas mostly, but then, i realized the passivity Phoenix stanza is delicious.. i like also that you wrote again about action/inaction and the idea of one, oneness, soulmates, home.. best symbol, the Infinity. pointing ending. very clever poem.
 — nisetru

too many birds these days and i'm quite inspired. thank you so much, nisetru.
 — unknown

hope you didn't forget to mispronounce "rapport".
 — unknown

 — unknown

I love birds :)
oh yes, the bird poetry contest, lovely poems i've read around here too.
welp. spring comes soon and there will be even more birds.
 — nisetru

i guess birds really are good at rapport, huh?
: )
 — fractalcore

those single word lines
when i read them it was like a big booming voice just for that word
also, i repeated each of those words automatically, the booming voice speaking the first and a regular one the second for to start into the next phrase
is that what you figured would happen
 — chuckle_s

thanks for reading, chuckle_s.

the one-word lines are parts of the
previous stanzas as this is a metered
piece. the echo, if any, should be sounded
in the head to facilitate contunuity.

hope you didn't forget to mispronounce 'rapport'.
: )
 — fractalcore

i pronounced it properly
didn't take the "s the right way though
in my defense the signifier for the phrase is passivity so there's almost a built-in
desire for silents
 — chuckle_s

thanks, chuckle_s.

that underscore in your name
indicates some bold moves.
: )
 — fractalcore

oh yes, you are bold.
: )
 — fractalcore

what do you think, Aziel?
: )
 — fractalcore

yoohoo, Aziel...
: )
 — fractalcore

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 — fractalcore

have you seen any birds lately?

cheeky me.
: )
 — fractalcore

consciousness explained isn't it? the architecture of human mind ....When it is starting to getting wrong, then Einstein had to join space and time to make what is called “space time continuum”. All based on somebody else’s mistakes. It’s all amusing; it sort of works, yeah, sort of... The reason is that they do not know the domain of space time in which their laws are valid. …The whole physics falls into a heap at the bottom in black hole, in a singularity! I liked your exploration... I am in position thanks to the imagination-stretching view of your poem and my experiencing it, to shift my awareness. This is great writing, that's what  I need. ivana.
 — unknown

thanks to you again, ivana.
i'd really like to see your
poetry posted here

if that's not too
much to

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 — fractalcore


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 — fractalcore


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 — fractalcore

wow, i liked the set up of this, very very clever and nice
 — psychofemale

thanks, psychofemale.

did you notice the 8-syllable count in every line?
also, it follows an A-B-C-D rhyme scheme, so i hope
you didn't forget to mispronounce 'rapport'.

; )
 — fractalcore

 — manuka

hi, manuka.

so nice to see you have a grand time.
; )
 — fractalcore


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 — fractalcore

i like this! ;)
 — softyetharsh

thank you, softyetharsh.

may i know what you like in this?
: )
 — fractalcore

oh yeah, getting the point of last stanza connoting soulmate..;)
 — softyetharsh


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 — fractalcore

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hey. just a fly bye on the way out!! wanted to let you know, you write really really beautiful stuff!! never stop!! loverly!! forever!! rocks fractal cores and magma. cheers!! have enjoyed reading your stuff even when i've not had time to post/comment. thanks for all the wonderful reads and magic!!
 — Clara