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Who is JohN GalT?
fractalcore

mumps explained why you missed
 1
your math quiz,
 2
 
 
or was it your new lesson?
 3
welp, you got a nice reason –
 4
 
 
not that I like having
 5
my wrinkled neck swelling,
 6
 
 
but the idea of my skin there smoothened
 7
is, by far, better than it ruined;
 8
 
 
nor do I even remember
 9
any one special number
 10
 
 
like 0.123333333333… for instance,
 11
whose fractal, no – fraction form I know perchance.
 12
 
 
but, that one’s really easy, we agree,
 13
unlike 0.232323232323…
 14
 
 
nah, don’t ask me to figure it out,
 15
'coz I’m a 3-time college drop-out;
 16
 
 
I suck at math like many a senile professor,
 17
though, frankly, I like it best from year 5 heretofore.
 18
 
 
there’s this number 41378 that we came to know
 19
with no apparent add-ons nor tricks to show.
 20
 
 
it doesn’t command so much mind stuff,
 21
so we own it we who come short at nuffin enuff.
 22
 
 
and, a very egotistic gift is in order, boxed, wrapped, ribboned –
 23
yeah he still carries the Whirled in that way old-fashioned.
 24
 
 
how warped and ripboned turn you off is not so surprising, haha,
 25
so out of sync like she lingering on that intellectual faux pas.
 26
 
 
oh,
 27
OK,
 28
 
 
I contradict me and I’m my own handyman and I got to fix me a g®in;
 29
maybe box my way there 'coz my feet are stuporic and I can box me from within.
 30




written a few hours ago


for the references made in ||23-26
start with this link:

http://youtube.com/watch?v=FzGFytGBDN8

and you can find your way around from there

31 Jan 08

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joey, joey, joey
 — unknown

unknown: is joey ok?

i hope he is.
: )
 — fractalcore

so joey's doin just fine.
: )
 — fractalcore

I don't mind this...it's the best of the four I read. Still not up to poe-quality...but not bad. 7/10
 — Poe

i love the funny playful tone.. math and figure out solutions, the ending.
wonderful experimental poem.
 — nisetru

thanks for dropping by, Poe.

thank you so much, nisetru.
still struggling with my works here.
: )
 — fractalcore

had to make 'wrapped, ribboned'
and 'warped and ripboned' trade
places.

: )
 — fractalcore

put them back where they used to be.
sleepy, sloppy me.
: )
 — fractalcore

What's the term for "fear of numbers"?  I'm sorry I wouldn't be able to appreciate your poem unless I learn to overcome such fear.  
 — happymole

i have no idea what that is, happymole.
one has to hate/fear numbers enough to find
a name for such a feeling.

i believe i started counting when i was 5.
i've lost count really since then how many
of my roten teeth i took out on my own or
how many teeth i have left.

numbers will somehow get one tired but
i'll never ever hate them.

thanks so much for reading.
: )
 — fractalcore

I don't hate numbers...I fear them.  Hate and fear are two different emotions. :)
 — happymole

didn't i say "...hate/fear..."?
maybe it's number-phobia
or numb(y)er-fear...it's a cheap
trick with words stupid guys like
me employ.

maybe
one's-too-three-for-five-sick's-even-hate
for the other.

damn, your reply's too quick.
: )
 — fractalcore

or maybe want-to-three-for-five-sick's-even-hate.
: )
 — fractalcore

hahaha. i chuckled. is the word in 29/30 supposed to be groin or grin?
funny. in a good way.

smile!
midare
 — midare

thanks for dropping by, midare.

cuts both ways...
three ways (un)even.

see
this
booduh
smile?
: )
 — fractalcore

the link is very good. try it.
: )
 — fractalcore

http://youtube.co m/watch?v=W_qQt9IrUc0

:3
 — Aziel

yeah, and that one, two.
: )
 — fractalcore

happy 2 years running
for this thing.

: )
 — fractalcore

quantoom boompfh.
; )
 — fractalcore

sweet
 — Empty

oh fibonacci fibonacci, make me an appachatti?
 — unknown

thank you, Empty.
any nits?

: )
 — fractalcore

dear unk,

bring the paparazzi in.
; )
 — fractalcore

Divine proportions indeed
 — unknown

appropriated divinely, yes.
thanks.

; )
 — fractalcore

but, just to clarify, there's no intentional
reference to the fibonacci sequence or the
golden ratio here.

; )
 — fractalcore

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