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Bit the Tidbits

Bubble breaks

written dec '07

24 Feb 08

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very good and lovely little poem, all to the point. i like its form too.
 — nisetru

your kindness overwhelms as always.
thank you, nisetru.
: )
 — fractalcore

 — EpicPants

: )
 — fractalcore

This does nothing for me. it does nothing, nothing, nothing, nothing. But what should it do? nothing?

I think i would go with "bends" over "breaks" though.
 — DeformedLion

"bends" sounds nice but it is a minute phase short
unlike "bursts" or "breaks".

we must do nothing about a piece which finished
and final

but thanks for always taking the time, DeformedLion.
: )
 — fractalcore

though "bends" brings a sense of tense
suspense to the piece... hmm, maybe on
another day i will consider it.
: )
 — fractalcore

I really like this! So much here. Deep
 — themolly

an honor to have you here, themolly.

thank you so much for your appreciation
and your poetry.
: )
 — fractalcore

who's kidding whom, unky?
: )
 — fractalcore