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my Ever(dear)est
happymole

inclined
 1
towards the Peak
 2
climbed
 3
in the
 4
Eternal Now
 5
 
 
the heights
 6
of passion burning
 7
the motor beneath
 8
my chest
 9
pounding
 10
 
 
singing
 11
breathing the song
 12
of our common
 13
desire
 14
 
 
otherwise
 15
sulking
 16
in ecstasy
 17
 
 
I
 18
journey
 19
without the
 20
slightest
 21
"why?"
 22
 
 
on this day
 23
like no other
 24
 
 
I grow
 25
 
 
wings, you
 26
lifting me to
 27
flight
 28
 
 
pushing for
 29
yet another
 30
day
 31
 
 
alone
 32
with
 33
you
 34



***2/26/08***

27 Feb 08

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ooh, i like this a lot. the words you use
are very familiar and fuel my passion
for climbing.

nice writing, happymole.
: )
 — fractalcore

not to mention the love for the
significant other.

special day, huh?
: )
 — fractalcore

beautiful love hymn
 — nisetru

The first ten lines really sing to me, a great jazz riff of thought.
 — Highwayman

!
 — unknown

unknown, flashing your member like this is more a myspace thing than here, cause we tend to look carefully, and i'm seeing that your organ is sort of an exclamation point and sort of existing without a body -- as though it was a nasty drawing on a toilet wall.
 — joey

thank you all for commenting on and liking this.
 — happymole

I agree with fractralcore! Very beautiful and heartfelt.
 — smugzy

hmmm, tutu-gather is a by-gone
word in the by-gone world.

isn't it weird?


***2/26/10***

; )
 — fractalcore

This is a beaut~
 — mandolyn

Why should supposedly "great things" end this (or that) way?  Any answer for this?
 — unknown

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