|Time Controlling - An Exercise in Futility
I think it should move faster!!
S l o w e r...
Not move at all.
But Time has an annoying way of
NOT doing what I think it should
My futile pushes
So very like
A mouse trying to alter the inexorable movements Of a train,
Leave me with the empty sense of
Nothing At All.
My boyfriend is far far far away studying for a year. Hence my struggle with the whole time thing!!
1 Mar 08
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What this may lack in any true poetic beauty is made up for in spirit. How about 8? Yes, I like 8. This reads like a journal entry with line breaks, but that's ok here. I would be tempted to slash a bunch of the adverbs and modifiers out to give it a more poemy feel, but that's me. This is cute ... I miss my boyfriend too, so perhaps I'm biased ha ha.
nickiblitz, after all this time you're still writing poetry. i miss you. where are you now? :)
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