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Time Controlling - An Exercise in Futility
nickiblitz

Sometimes
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I think it should move faster!!
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Sometimes
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S l o w e r...
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Sometimes
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Not move at all.
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But Time has an annoying way of
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NOT doing what I think it should
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And so
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My futile pushes
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and
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useless pulls,
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So very like
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A mouse trying to alter the inexorable movements Of a train,
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Leave me with the empty sense of
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Having fulfilled
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Nothing At All.
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My boyfriend is far far far away studying for a year. Hence my struggle with the whole time thing!!

1 Mar 08

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What this may lack in any true poetic beauty is made up for in spirit. How about 8?  Yes, I like 8.  This reads like a journal entry with line breaks, but that's ok here.  I would be tempted to slash a bunch of the adverbs and modifiers out to give it a more poemy feel, but that's me.  This is cute ... I miss my boyfriend too, so perhaps I'm biased ha ha.
 — VeroniCat

thanks!
 — nickiblitz

nickiblitz, after all this time you're still writing poetry.  i miss you.  where are you now? :)
 — mrkhoo

very nice.
: )
 — fractalcore

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