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Bruise[d] Mee next to Lee
fractalcore

I:
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won-a-bee
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none-cha-coo
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must-err-like
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he.
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written 2/26/08
http://poetrycritical.net/read/13694/
thanks, gnormal.

5 Mar 08

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this sounds nice but i'll come back to it to give it more thought.
 — happymole

I tried a few keys, they didn't open this. Me and my ADD will move on.
 — cowork

what?
 — unknown

It's genius but I’m so tired of genius,…so common place in art today.
 — cowork

were it an attempt at genius it would be vain. does it speak of anything to you anyhow?
 — unknown

: )
 — fractalcore

he saydabo:
sims-snatcho
sis
ta,
gir.
 — joey

koolaid, anyone?

http://poetrycritic al.net/read/13694/
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 — fractalcore

ah. yes. not very professional on the surface, but it's probably in code.
 — joey

got that right, joey; it's in code.

thanks for stopping by, everyone.
: )
 — fractalcore

not yers, gnorm's -- yers is totally poem.
 — joey

DEEcode, joey.

thanks.
: )
 — fractalcore

No
 — cowork

i like that it reads as two poems in one. or two meanings, on two levels: the first obvious, and the second, deeper. I think 'bruised' in the title explains the deep meaning of the poem.
I also like Bruce Lee.
I like it very much, very good little modern poem.
 — nisetru

you're always very kind, nisetru.
thanks.
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 — fractalcore

nice poem-san
 — chuckle_s

thanks, chuck.
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 — fractalcore

fun
ee.
 — raskolniikov

it must of hurt when you hit your self with those numchucks man - wow I tried them but my weapon of choice was the bo staff when i did aikido for a few years - only hit myself once with that - the numchucks were too convoluted for me and my shins got bopped to often - you have a way with sounding fractured words fractalcore
 — AlchemiA

thank you so much, AlchemiA.
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 — fractalcore

to you, too, rask.
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 — fractalcore

This is pretty good because its about your first orgasm on a komikbook.
 — kurt

very poetic statement, kurt.

you know what kurt cobain used to say?
cufk, tish, sips!

thanks for stopping by and welcome to PC.
: )
 — fractalcore

forgot to thank you, cowork.
i don't even understand myself sometimes,
er a lot of times.
: )
 — fractalcore

How can I ask you this without sounding like a complete moron?

I didn't get the second deeper meaning of the poem? Help.
 — unknown

sweet unknown its clever wordplay. and its becoming quite a signature for fractal.
I:
wannabe
nunchaku
muster-like
he(bruce lee)
got it?
 — trochee

Yeah got it, it's really clever. Good job fractalcore.
 — unknown

thanks, unk.

close enough, trochee.

I:
wannabe
nunchaku
master like
he.

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 — fractalcore

ahh yes. quite close.
 — trochee

those nunchucks can hurt you badly
but pain is the closest we can get to joy.
or what am i saying?

a lot of hurt(ing) happened here last night, eh?
: )
 — fractalcore

nice title. good poem as well.
 — listen

thanks, listen.

glad you like the title.
Bruce Mee comes after Bruce Lee
if we talk alphabetical about it, hehe.

how's you doing?
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 — fractalcore

Peace!  
 — happymole

very good. and i want to say this poem makes it even better. your touch is so delicate but firm at the same time ... i'm not sure how you do that, but it works well, in all your poems. and in this one.
 — listen

namaskar, happymole...
really good to see you back.
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 — fractalcore

its not clever...
 — SeanConnery

do i have your permission to share this with my retarded chinese neighbor? really i do not know if he is retarded or if his english is bad? but being with him reminds me of your poems.
 — unknown

well, it's good to be inspired by other poets,
especially gnormal.

thanks for the comeback and the kind words, listen.
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 — fractalcore

Hey Unk, Don't make fun of Fracky's vertigo inducing poems because he suffers from a severe case dyslexia.
 — PrudIsDaWay

ey, dear SeanConnery sir.
thanks for the comments. you're entitled to your opinion and
i'll go check your writings when i got the time.
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 — fractalcore

last unky, you can do whatever you want with it.
your neighbor must be an autistic savant or something
and he'd be able to tell you how to read the poem in it.

pls send him my love and regards.
: )
 — fractalcore

yo, PrusIdDaWay homie.
nice to see you here. how come you haven't
posted any poems yet? i bet you're good.
: )
 — fractalcore

eye juan a flea

from this pentad
 — unknown

well, ewe shoo don't flea on five wings, body.
dot spree tea danger us.

butt thUNKs fore stopping bye.
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 — fractalcore

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