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You're, I'm
ClayManire

Yearning for a hand
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On the lip of the
 2
Underworld,
 3
 
 
Allow my
 4
Religion to
 5
Enter and grab hold.
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Insufficient in
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All else worth
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Mentioning.
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17 Mar 08

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nice
 — poetbill

I would change title to "You Are, I Am"
 — poetbill

Agree with Poetbill.  The title needs to match.  
 — Isabelle5

i amme am i we

you are i am

let's ditch religion
and be ourselves.
: )
 — fractalcore

Very humble and beautiful poem. Not sure if I agree about changing the title. Because I can see that in reading the rest of the poem "You're" and "I'm" flow better....which I think is probably more important than changing the title. It hooked me in to read the poem as it stands.
 — smugzy

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