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perfect imperfections
unknown

outside the fields
 1
are golden although
 2
there is no warmth.
 3
 
 
the light has awoken
 4
me too early again
 5
and you remain
 6
in a slumber.
 7
 
 
you look perfect
 8
with or without me.
 9
and i don't really mind.
 10

25 Mar 08

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short but strong
 — poetbill

strong and weak
 — unknown

hehe that is the way love is lost, cause they don't communicate, one thinks that the other thinks that the other did that the other may or not, i know my truth, that is all i need, is it actually.
i liked the poem.
 — unknown

neither do i.
: )
 — fractalcore

blah blah blah
 — unknown

not really enough to this
 — unknown

'outside the fields' means anything outside of the fields, so this is a cubist poem, where you're both inside and outside at once. i think maybe you need a comma after 'outside' cause the rest of this is just norman rockwell flat realistic.
 — cadmium

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