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before turning twentyone,
mrkhoo

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of becumming two
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27 Mar 08

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i liked this very much.
 — raskolniikov

Come on, what's with the 'becumming' and the cute little attempt at odd format?  

Say what you need to say.  I don't think you have said anything at all, certainly not a poem.  
 — Isabelle5

Well, this is suppose to be a "play" on one of e.e cumming's poems.
Hence, the "cumming".
Hence the odd format.
Hence the theme of the poem (check out e.e. cumming's poem on loneliness)
 — mrkhoo

I saw eec right away, and he must know poetry, because he is in libraries!
 — TCooks

nice write, btw
 — TCooks

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e.e. cummings
 — mrkhoo

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*edit:  that's the original version
 — mrkhoo

Well, I don't know the poem but the explanation and the attempt get points from me!  
 — Isabelle5

Hey! how are you? i'm still here, its good to hear from you!
 — nickiblitz

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