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Heaven lingers between silk sheets
ChedelSol

silent perspiration beads on the soft curves
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tangled in silk the machine self-destructs
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and echoes, repeating...it fell apart
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though dusty, worn through threadbare shirts
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rising and falling in mellow waves
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cool breath, deep and steady- closer than mirrors
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stars hover and kiss in their natural attraction
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desperately flailing to trade superpowers
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their fluidity dynamic and intertwined
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pale smoke rises light and swift
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as the beating fades and full circle
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back to dust a memory lingers
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in this room you can't touch the floor
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the electric buzz evaporates and drained
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equilibrium in the red collapses on itself
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ripping away all that came before
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the sweetness dissolved and stirred in the mix
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down smooth with a twinge of bitterness
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the room lies naked, empty except for a stain
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3 Apr 08

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wow.
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 — fractalcore

This needs punctuation.  Consider it silk stockings for the poem, necessary for the presentation, even though we will not notice them once the action begins.

Too much word without a breathing point.  
 — Isabelle5

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