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Concerning a poem I wrote the other day (with added dash & sparkle)
unknown

I wrote a poem
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the other day that
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nisetru omitted to *ten*,
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and fractalcore couldn't
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even be bothered to
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favouritise -
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they're asking for *trouble*
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if you ask me.
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6 Apr 08

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why bother. i mean, really?
 — unknown

thank you, man.
are you like a priest in vegas?

nisetru is such a fine poet and
which poem of yours did we miss?\
: )
 — fractalcore

this is too common-speak. it needs dash. needs some sparkly bits.
 — DeformedLion

well, yeah, i have this penchant for faving.
are we the only faving freaks here? i'm sure
there are others, too.
: )
 — fractalcore

perhaps "failed" might be smoother than "omitted.
what is "favouritise"?  couldn't you just say favourite?

this is pretty cute though.
 — jenakajoffer

oh yes, very kool.
 — DeformedLion

LOL--yes, definitely cute.  I rather like 'favourtise' and always fond of a dash and sparkly bits.  Well-played.
 — sybarite

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