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I Love Myself And You Live Once And For All
fractalcore

*
 1
 
 
party-culls
 2
of free nay-to-err
 3
too and fro-leak...
 4
 
 
 
 
smells like teen spirit;
 5
you know you’re right –
 6
better to burn out than to fade away
 7
 
 
 
 
END
 8
 
 
 
 
we can have some more
 9
‘coz Nature is a whore.
 10
 
 
 
 
START
 11
 
 
 
 
a new day with a whole new
 12
birth, a rebirth you always knew
 13
 
 
 
 
that will go on and off
 14
 
 
 
 
and on again to another,
 15
the significant other –
 16
interstellar par-tea-calls sum-on one another...
 17
 
 
 
 
never found a wise man –
 18
if so, it was a woman;
 19
 
 
 
 
when the light’s out
 20
it’s less dangerous;
 21
 
 
 
 
pays-tree hangs from the chandelier
 22
'fore tee-her-tea long years…
 23




* written a few hours ago


as an extension to "Transference..."


with special thanks to Kurt Cobain –
the grunge icon who lived his life in
the only way he knew – for his poetry,
art, music, and brains


and to all those living their lives to
the fullest today




Love you all Eternally,

           ____
          __/__
            /\
          /   \

      fractalcore
           : )

13 Apr 08

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thank you
beautiful
 — unknown

pleasure is mine, unk.
: )
 — fractalcore

stinky stick figure popsicle
 — unknown

thanks, stinky unky. you should've given it
a "1" instead of a "2".
: )
 — fractalcore

do you write on paper or digital first?
 — raskolniikov

thanks, rask.

i've developed the habit of writing on
the computer first and last. paper is
much more expensive than free
internet hours, hehe.

why do you ask?
: )
 — fractalcore

your poetry is always different so i was interested to know what you wrote it on.
 — raskolniikov

i borrowed some of Kurt Cobain's song
tiles and lyrics for this one as a tribute
to him and his kind...as a celebration of
life [lived to the fullest].

every attempt i make is a struggle, rask.
and it's always as if it were the first time.

it always is.
: )
 — fractalcore

Particles of free nature expressed with even more meaning...  A great mode of showing your smartness there, fract.   I just don't know if you wrote this poem for two icons (disticnt but belong to party-cull-are cognitive ready-culls)  to be reckoned channels of revelations about eternity.
 — happymole

hi, happymole. just the simpleton fractalcore speaking
in his language here. it's open to all interpretations but
you got the important points.

1 = singularity = Unknown

or sometimes 2...and they live by (twice) their anonymity
if not animosity.
: )
 — fractalcore

not all of them, that is.
: )
 — fractalcore

nice extension
 — chuckle_s

ey there, chuckle_s.

thanks.
: )
 — fractalcore

new pigtail haircut.

what do you think?
: )
 — fractalcore

+_)(TDRKL
?>MKN
you've got an amazing sense of life.
 — OKcomputer

yes, and life is hard, OKcomputer.

thanks for taking the time.
: )
 — fractalcore

great turns of phrase
 — newslang5

really like the repetition, and the sudden breaks.

quick interrupted rhythm.
 — panicbutton

particles of free nature is party-cue-lovely and apt -- the God particle Higgs/Boson has as its attributes no mass nor spin and resides in the great big nothing of space -- it is postulated by some Priests of Quantum Science that from this Nothing comes everything -- the Aboriginal concept behind the cornucopia echoes this free particle of Nature where the spiral comes from nothing and manifests as the abundance of creation -- you've broken the forms and rituals of words here again fractalcore and remade the Word in your Imagination - living love for all-ways
 — AlchemiA

newslang5:
thank you for reading and appreciating.

panicbutton:
nice username. thanks for liking the piece.

AlchemiA:
nicely-put. you got it down to a tee.
thank you always for your kindness.

: )
 — fractalcore

well, i actually wrote this as a
birthday present for my bestest
dearest friend.

just revisting and reliving that
day.

: )
 — fractalcore

happy 2nd anniversary to this post.
; )
 — fractalcore

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