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for ka
wendz

so we'll go on treading water,
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for years and years to come,
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every one of us,
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because you, sweet lady,
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are with the angels now,
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held safe in their hands,
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the way you always held my words,
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my trust, my dreams, my hopes,
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and all that i ever naively believed in,
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all that you ever naively believed in, too
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sacred in yours.
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"For everything I touch, you touch. For every step I take, you take. For every breath I breathe, you breathe. Every dollar I make, you make. I told you we'd make it to the sunshine one day, you just got there a little quicker."

15 Apr 08

Rated 9.5 (8.1) by 4 users.
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Ooo. Good.
 — themolly

sigh
 — Ananke

Eternity be fulfilled, ka.

...It always Is...
: )
 — fractalcore

Beautiful and I love the personal touch of this.  
 — Isabelle5

What??? Ka died? That just can't be.
 — unknown

Ka...(sigh.)... :-(  Thank you for liking my writing as much as you did.  You're with the other angels now, sweetheart.
 — starr

oh immortal beloved stirs with stars in this profoundly wondrous piece - wendz you sing here--
 — AlchemiA

i don't understand how this is top rated, it's just not a good poem, sorry.
 — unknown

It's honoring a selfless contributor to poetry and poets, not necessarily the poem itself. Just look at it as flying the pc flag at half-mast for a while.
 — unknown

^ and that's all it is; the ratings aren't for this, I don't think, but for ka - she's always been a ten, always will be.
 — wendz

A beautiful eulogy!
 — trochee

so sigh
 — onklcrispy

We love Ka. All of us here, trapped in this one body. You've done well in the title alone. The words that follow are a fitting tribute.

I miss her.
 — unknown

I miss and treasure her like I will always miss and treasure humanity, and life, and love, and all the good things that keep the soul alive.
 — wendz

This is beautifully written, and very sad. ):
 — Aziel

lols...i think tis is.....like keats,but in e bad way
 — unknown

For Kaleb.
 — turboswami

she was a good one. one of the first i liked when i discovered this site 6 years ago.

way to honor her, wendy.
 — mould_jesus

what year are we in?
 — unknown

i changed usernames.
 — mould_jesus

totally not the point though.
 — mould_jesus

i remember when ka died
so sudden sad strange
revisiting this to recall better days around here
 — unknown

She was truly awesome.  :-)
 — starr

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