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Fear of Abstraction
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Your anxiety
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boiled; you let it;
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you did not want to be
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the next removal,
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nor did you crave
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cutthroat.
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It would seem
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you did not want to
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understand
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this concept, which
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you could not grasp with
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your knowledge;
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like a child
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at the play
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ground, you did not
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crave
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exclusion.
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19 Apr 08

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I'm just not getting it; It makes me think of being voted off an island!
Yet, there is something I like about it, because I read it over and over.
 — cowork

thanks. this poem is abstract, and i think that might dilute it a little.

it is about a person who doesn't want to be excluded, or abstracted, by society. i am glad it is worth several reads, however.

and i'm sure you get it fine. it is indeed pretty simple.
 — listen

if only you knew what i got from this.
the emotion here (even though it is controlled, even though it may only be my own), affected me quite personally,
made my skin shiver,
would make tears if i wasn't tough today.

thank you for writing,
=-)
 — jenakajoffer

i'm glad i had this written down on my pc fave list.  and come to think of it, after all this time, i read the last line as 'inclusion' for my son.  and then this poem works perfectly.  but, the strange thing is, i read it how you have it when i first commented, and it was perfect then.  very weird.
 — jenakajoffer

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