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Escap(ad)e
happymole

Making an entrance
 1
unnoticed
 2
with silent fancies
 3
eternal
 4
 
 
Thirsting for f(l)avor
 5
like living torment
 6
to endure preferred
 7
anguish
 8
 
 
Diluting lucidity
 9
to circumvent pitfall
 10
tears and dread as solvents
 11
unceasing
 12
 
 
Taking an exit
 13
to finally bring forth
 14
with convenience
 15
(y)our emancipation.
 16

28 Apr 08

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I Love You.
 — p_p_love

Thanks.  :)
 — happymole

huh?
 — happymole

nice moves in this wordy exposition to a longer poem with fewer words. clever moves, but the situation sounds like it called for at least that.
 — joey

Delightful
 — CrudeEcstasy

wow.

that's all.
: )
 — fractalcore

maybe remove all the brackets...

annoying more than clever thinks me.

(Lady?)
 — DeformedLion

right, Ija and joey.

happymole has accomplished yet another
feat here. she did/said what she had to do/say
extraordinarily.

intelligent words used intelligently.
: )
 — fractalcore

Thanks fract.  

So what do you think about DL's comment?  Shall I remove the brackets?  
 — happymole

no, the brackets are perfect.
when will you write again?

: )
 — fractalcore

just revisiting.
how lovely and sad.
: )
 — fractalcore

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