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REWRITE
grneyeddevil

ebb and flow
 1
berated soul
 2
make moats
 3
in terra deep
 4
 
 
sleep not on straw
 5
peep not a wink
 6
revised
 7
rewritten creep
 8
 
 
speak not on petty precipice
 9
off-setting signs
 10
sweet sentiments
 11
defenseless inner evidence
 12
condemns
 13
this hapless beast
 14
 
 
prickly pickled paradigm
 15
incite
 16
succeed
 17
seduce
 18
rewrite
 19

29 Apr 08

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esses and pees!
splendid!
 — jenakajoffer

oh hello, it's you...
is your name another version of
grneyedmonster?
=-)
 — jenakajoffer

Perhaps but I'm generally not the jealous type. I just have green eyes and can be fairly devious at times. Thanks jen! : )
 — grneyeddevil

Why, is there a grneyedmonster on pc?
 — grneyeddevil

oh i'm sure pc is not exempt of them.  =-)
i just have a particular liking for green and envy
and other colourful symbols.

pretty cool thing you have here.
 — jenakajoffer

Hah! Yes many green eyed monsters indeed. ;p
 — grneyeddevil

the word "soul" should never be in a poem. cliche.
 — unknown

ok now that's just a stupid statement.
 — grneyeddevil

Anyone with something intelligent to say?
 — grneyeddevil

DONKEY-KONG!
 — DeformedLion

Hmmmm. Not quite what I was looking for but...thanks? BTW did you see that documentary " King of Kong: A Fistful Of Quarters"? Funny shit.
 — grneyeddevil

Soooo.....anyone else?
 — grneyeddevil

Testing...testing...1,2,3. Is this thing on?
 — grneyeddevil

{:>)
 — unknown

Last stanza has become my mantra.  ;D
 — advisingaway

Cool! Thanks for saying so.
 — grneyeddevil

shameless self promotion
 — grneyeddevil

.
 — grneyeddevil

YOU"RERIGHT
fractalcore

your right
like mine
would be
left to rot
unstood for
stood up

unclaimed
if i forgot

or even ignored
to write the right
or even the wrong
of nature's song

this very day
and on and
on and
on


written 05/30/08
thanks for the inspiration, grneyeddevil.

i'm a slave to the urge.
: )
 — fractalcore

slave to the urge
core to cock
ticking...
still ticking
waiting for tock
inspired by choirs
quoting your praise
inspired by your twisting
and turn of a phrase

Thanks Fractal!
 — grneyeddevil

thank you.
: )
 — fractalcore

oh HAHA* smiles* i get it!
 — unknown

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