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|                        foe-tons
|                              .
|                             --
|                           twoo
|                         buoyed
|                     at the trough
|                        throwed,
|                        the crest
|                        dreflects
|       buy the test,test,test
|       f r e e !!!
|       freed,damnedtofrolic    =    mc^2
|       away : in
|       turbo-lent I'm-ages...
|                                              .
|                                             --
|                                         quest
|                                  for the Om
|                            owebelooooong
|                        of long be-fore ––
|                             a-head,
|                       the Head, old
|                           flart:
|                      the Wind
|                fire it up
|           on stone, thee
|         Tombstone
|       of Light-kneeing
|       pray, name your price
|        do, say -- the Onely thing;
|           eye: the [demi]Gawd steers
|                            multiple moons on
|                                     his cohesive
|                                    scoffee-tea...
|                           wingedbee water
|                        on a spring
|                    die-aye
=                ∞

                  soulmates do exist
                    i've found mine

           Diana Jiganie w/ all my love

                           /   \

                            : )

                   written 04/30/08
                      thanks, joey.

3 May 08

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we got frogs and toads at the speed of de-light here and your way-words wile us beguile and sus us inWORDs flow-er and hop-eh -- wondrous meta-write on joey's kelly fractalcore
 — AlchemiA

thanks a lot, AlchemiA.
joey is an amazing guy.

how do you like the format?
: )
 — fractalcore

finally ditched "demagogue".
hell-low, [demi]Gawd...
: )
 — fractalcore

Energy is a redundant thing.
: )
 — fractalcore

yes, better than my kelly. this one is a poem. even the shape works, and i haven't seen working shape in about a hundred years. it's not that it does anything in my world, it's that you've written such a beautiful world world.
 — joey

thanks for the inspiration.
for you...and there are two boys here.
; )
 — fractalcore

wonderful reading, play of words and visual, i like it very much
 — nisetru

thanks, nisetru.
still struggling...
: )
 — fractalcore

and joey, here is where all the worlds spin at the
same axis; or at least two of them are twins.

sorry for the mess i left on your kelly's comment
: )
 — fractalcore

the format is AWEsum
 — AlchemiA

I wish I understood this, but it looks very intriguing to say the very least.  I like some of the word playing, the arrow, the E = mc^2 imagery (dual phrase in this case, lol).

Is there a way I could ask you to explain?
 — Aziel

AlchemiA, thank you, man.
: )
 — fractalcore

thank you very much, Aziel.

sorry, i can't and won't explain this to

someday you'll know.
: )
 — fractalcore

aweright, that's a lovely sicks.
care to explain?

or not, hehe.
: )
 — fractalcore

i think all the lines up the left really solidify the shape so that it has an anchor for the eyeballzz
foe-tons -- yeah, not sure why that is. human nature?
 — chuckle_s

thank you so much, chuckle_s.

did you notice the equal sign at the base of
the [thin] arrow and the infinity symbol at the base
of the poem? you can either go upwards on the
left side and let the symbol[s] bring your eyes
towards the moniker in blue; or upwards on the
right side by reading the poem backwards.

that is, of course, if reading in the conventional
way bores you.

human nature reverse-engineered, if you will.
: )
 — fractalcore

very nifty! i wondered at the significance of the arrow. unfortunately, i don't rate, so in my present (logged-in) state i am disallowed from seeing the blue.
thinking of blue -- i strongly recommend you check out a gizmoid entitled "my index finger just" on this site, then follow it where it leads. incredible.
 — chuckle_s

i meant the word-arrow, of course
 — chuckle_s

can someone explain this? besides the author who 's resistance to this is pussyling?
 — unknown

i think i've seen that piece long before, chuckle_s.
by blu himself, right?

sorry unk, i didn't mean to be pussyling you or
anybody at all.

: )
 — fractalcore

its a vorTEXT -- vortices are an interesting phenomenon in Nature -- all the little whirls and churls in a stream rushing to the Sea are little vortices cleaning the water right down to the atomic level -- the fish has this phenomenon mastered as he manages the whirls around him so that he can bullet up the falls -- vortices are apparently one way we can levitate and the UFO folks have utilized this technology apparently -- Any spiral motion with closed streamlines is vortex flow -- so the infinity sign at the bottom is TRUTH and BEAUTY in Nature --
 — AlchemiA

your complement supplements and compliments, AlchemiA.

there's a more visual vortex in COME|STUNT CHANGE
if you'd like to check it out.

thank you.
: )
 — fractalcore

>aweright, that's a lovely sicks.
care to explain?

or not, hehe.
: )
— fractalcore<

and now a dwarfen t[h]ree?
now you're becoming half-cocky,
don't you thUNK?

butt thUNKS just the same.
: )
 — fractalcore

I love your fractal syntax. You are a unique snowflake. *
The visual presentation here is mesmorising. Good one!
 — grneyeddevil

thanks, grneyeddevil.

btw, how do you get rid of scalp flakes
aside from taking a bath regularly?
; )
 — fractalcore

: )
 — fractalcore

Do you have "head and shoulders" over there...? I'd think one of those anti-dandruff shampoos would take care of it. Or cover your head in honey and sprinkle salt on it.
 — DeformedLion

just all shoulders and no head.
i'm in pretty deep flaky shit, huh?
: )
 — fractalcore

fractalcore - Drink lottsa water with -Hydrogen and imbued with many minerals -- not the chLoriHated type and sweat man sweat
 — AlchemiA

thanks, Alc.
i think i've finally figured out the answer:

take a bath regularly...as in "everyday"
regularly, hehe.

should've been easy were it not for the
all shoulders and no head.
; )
 — fractalcore

it's good but it's also bad
 — unknown

your yin-yang is good

but you'll have to defend your
"bad" descriptor.
: )
 — fractalcore

i love the creativity here. word creations, excel. lent me a few laughs, and such.

but good humor. not overdone at all.

not overdone in any way, or shape, or the awesome form you chose.
 — listen

thank you so much, listen.
glad to have you here.

: )
 — fractalcore

quantum bump.
; )
 — fractalcore

a poem about light...photons.

light is a wave, trough and crest.

Gawd is light, as well as NOT

Great poem! :)
 — cebukitty

well, it's not so hard to spot, is it?
but did you meet gawd on your way out
or noticed how unsuspecting lovers and
friends get gossiped about in the diner?

thanks for your patronage, by the way.
your espresso's on the house.
: )
 — fractalcore


and foes, too.
: )
 — fractalcore

bumpeetee day, everee-one.
; )
 — fractalcore


; )
 — fractalcore

you clever wacky pack you.
 — mandolyn

fekk mee?

now you're getting a lil too
excited there with your RUBBER,
mandolyn, heheheheheheh...

; )
 — fractalcore

i think you're looking for this one, mr JKWebster sir.
; )
 — fractalcore

That's it!  Love it...thanks.
 — JKWeb

you're kind as always.
thank you, sir.
; )
 — fractalcore

Ok fine, like that is it fact.
 — unknown

ah yes the tornado poem!!
 — mandolyn

hi, unk.

it's fine with me, ok?
it's a fact.

; )
 — fractalcore

hi rubbee mander,

it's a twisted twister, hehe.
; )
 — fractalcore

loved it!! thank you. very much.
 — unknown

thank you, unk.
: )
 — fractalcore

Awesome work! I always love your word play
 — psychofemale

enticed with the tonality though was not convinced to read with the eyes but aloud. from then on mono-tones supplied thoughts of having to babble in a hammock - side by side or hand in hand. a struck!
 — unknown

Lovely. Thanks.
 — unknown

so you have a periodic window in a stochastic system. not bad going o fractalated one. amazing how you do this kind of piece
 — unknown

cooooooooool! love it
 — unknown

author,your works are outlandish.
 — unknown

What you did there in the middle of this poem, was fucking creationalism .COOL like the helix-- can you make it a double?
 — unknown

a fave


 — funes

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 — unknown