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Albert Cross-dresses In Lab Coats
TCooks

Come here. Let's dress ourselves in tangle-
 1
meant twisted quantum specific scientists
 2
who study abstraction/ finagling-angles
 3
in corners connecting our consciousness
 4

5 May 08

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Really melodic tone.

nice.
 — unknown

Who's albert?
 — unknown

Is this a parody about fat-albert? Cause damn that dude was PHAT. Just kdding; I love this poem...this coming from a physics major.
 — unknown

haha thanks unk- glad u picked up on that.
 — unknown

My question is about the punctuation in l2, do you guys like it or is it confusing? By this way this is about love, does the title throw it off too much or make the relevance to the underlying theme more evident?
 — unknown

Einstein right?
 — unknown

Yes, exactly, the poem is based around the idea of quantum entanglement and connectivity of lovers.
 — unknown

an origional and sparkling take on the love poem, i find more nuances the more i read it....but i suppose i'm biased
 — sherains

I had good motivation

; )
 — unknown

Yowza.
 — themolly

.... is that a good yowza or a bad yowza?
 — unknown

this is stunning
 — unknown

I'm really glad its well received. It is a BIG shift from my normal poems.

Thanks for the comments everyone.
 — unknown

can I love this some more? great, thanks
 — sherains

...o jeez, where were you guys on l1 "lets" should be "let's" right?
 — unknown

correct, the contration of let+us.  guess I liked it so much i didn't even notice!  
 — sherains

Good yowza
 — themolly

Thanks Molly, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm happy with how it came out considering the pieces I typically submit
 — unknown

with all due respect this is a horrible poem by any measure.  i think you know this.  this is an undeveloped sliver of a retarded thought.  pitch your ego out the window and respect us and yourself a little more.
 — unknown

well, i like this poem a lot.

but it may just be me.
: )
 — fractalcore

I`m entangled by this gathering momentum of spinless quantum dreams where all only seems to be not this or that but my Heart does attract! -- love the simplicity ans connectivity here --
 — AlchemiA

i have no idea why this is considered anything great or beyond average

please explain? it s  far too wordy

anything with quantum in it is getting too much respect out of people's need to compensate for their ignorance of what the F all of this means
 — unknown

unk -- it`s a meme not a you you
 — unknown

or question what you mean. quantum entanglement is the idea two objects are intimately connected even while apart. It's a poem about distant lovers, still being just in love even when they are not directly together. The scientists references are to bring that idea into the poem without forcing it down your throat.

Thanks for readin'


douche.
 — TCooks

Forgot to mention;

Not a poem by any measure? Too "wordy"?  It's in iambic pentameter, hard to follow a structure without, you know, following it.  
 — TCooks

makes no difference

Come here. Let's mess ourselves in tangle
words torture dumdums with pathetic sentences
that muddy abstraction fishing for angles
in corners rejected by our consciousness


dilbert
 — unknown

to each their own.
 — TCooks

what better way to prove your intellectual superiority than by throwing in the term 'dumdum'

some of us will just never be able to compete
 — unknown

youre only competing against your own retardation

your better is better than my better

haha

smooches
 — unknown

I also pet retards.
 — TCooks

touching yourself is not a crime

so go ahead
 — unknown

so nothing else huh thats it?
 — TCooks

good tone and I like how well the first line draws the reader in..
 — thom

Ija-

Zola?(sp?)
 — TCooks

thom-

thanks, I used to first line to "bring the two together" keeping with the whole quantum metaphor
 — TCooks

press release for the alberto camuso hair product line... stuff to untangle coffee-house head.
 — joey

im still confused as to how this makes me seem like I have this warped sense of self importance. anyone care to explain?
 — TCooks

I like it
 — Naltlot

silly, big words mean you're a snob
 — sherains

Ohhh, I get it!
 — TCooks

So here is the question, how can it become better? is it possible for this to become a "poem"?
 — TCooks

I don't see any way this isn't a poem
 — sherains

fight?  seriously?  i meant i think this IS a poem...
 — sherains

i think we should scrap this bit-o-convo and call it a draw, i'm in danger of becoming uselessly confused  / -:
 — sherains

ah, i understand what you meant now
 — sherains

I don't understand that again, but oh well
 — sherains

i don't understand why i would need more confidence, i think you misunderstood what i meant from the begining
 — sherains

okay...i was responding to your comment 'who says this isn't a poem?', saying i think, it very much IS a poem.  that's all.
 — sherains

no no, i know, and i meant my comment in a "yeah you're right, who says it's not a poem, i think it's a poem" way.  the problem here is that we're communicating through non-inflective means.

*whew*
 — sherains

This is too convoluted for ordinary mortals such as me. My eyes glaze over and all poetry is lost in befuddlement.
 — unknown

nice random
 — unknown

NW
 — unknown

Anything new at all?
 — unknown

I can't decide if I like this because of what it stands for or hate it because the visuals I get really do not connect with the meaning
 — unknown

the poem suggests that there is a fetish to science and little else.  equally you could write a poem about washing powder, star trek, office stationary, lumberjacking..  whatever doesn't float your boat so to speak.  it's sad.
 — unknown

wow, surprised to see this back...



unk1- I agree,  the meaning of love is kind of caught up in the science, chemistry lab feeling, i should have used a different title as well, but I want to hint at the meaning

unk2. no its not. and if the top three things that come to head when you think about anything you dislike are; washing powder, star trek and office stationary you got issues.....

Thanks for reading tho. This poem is bitter sweet to me now
 — TCooks

lol, I like your sense of humour.
 — unknown

Its a defense mechanism, I have this condition where I only write shitty poems so I mock before being mocked.


but no seriously, it's not a sad poem, it's a love poem. A poem that says true love will never die even if the two in love are not physically together.

If you read that as sad, maybe you need to get the washing powder (WFT) out of your eyes.
 — TCooks

How were you intending on wearing the scientists?  
 — unknown

Prob skin them, thinking hoodie. Why?
 — TCooks

Because it's not obvious.  Dress could mean salad dressing.  A waldorf perhaps.  If this were to be the case, I'd expect to see more apples, celery, and mayonnaise in your imagery.
 — unknown

Maybe I'm a bit slow.
 — unknown

Robin Hood, Robin Hood,
Riding through the glen,
Robin Hood, Robin Hood,
With his band of men,
Feared by the bad, loved by the good,
Robin Hood! Robin Hood! Robin Hood!

He called the greatest archers
To a tavern on the green,
They vowed to help the people of the king,
They handled all the trouble
On the English country scene,
And still found plenty of time to sing.

Robin Hood, Robin Hood,
Riding through the glen,
Robin Hood, Robin Hood,
With his band of men,
Feared by the bad, loved by the good,
Robin Hood! Robin Hood! Robin Hood!
 — unknown

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