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anti?freeze!!! my flathappeefeetulence
fractalcore

i think, you think, it stinks...
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[hold (that) thought]
 2
 
 
reeks of passion
 3
pretty (you/i are/am)
 4
bad
 5
 
 
[don't]
 6
let it out
 7
[yet]
 8




written 4/02/08 and/or 4/06/08


thanks to

happymole for your username/poems
http://poetrycritical.net/read/47677/
http://poetrycritical.net/read/47931/

nisetru for your response/thoughts/poems
http://poetrycritical.net/forum/read/146407/

chuckle_s for your poem(s)
http://poetrycritical.net/read/47308/



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               fractalcore
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6 May 08

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a love poem, i like it
 — nisetru

thank you so much, nisetru.
: )
 — fractalcore

LOL! This will forever be ringing in my head whilst in the elevator.
 — grneyeddevil

welp,
keep away
from elevators
to be
safe.

unless,
of course,

you wanna play fire
with your
significant other
in there
with your

highly
flammable

love-gas.
: )
 — fractalcore

so nobody else loves gas?
shucks!
: )
 — fractalcore

hehe
no problem!
 — chuckle_s

i wrote a little countrywestern sounding ditty for my girl that contains the phrase dutch-oven! i guess i'll have to sing it to her soon i've been putting it off
 — chuckle_s

time is gold in the oven, chuckle_s.

thanks for stopping by.
: )
 — fractalcore

very witty; creative with a good metaphor; told like an expert.

nice.
 — listen

hi, listen.

i didn't expect much praise for this piece but thank
you for your kind words as always.
: )
 — fractalcore

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