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Society Lost
theshattered

A world with too much freedom is abandoned and ends in tears and crashing waves.

You can see the world,
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vast, changing
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and, with civil chagrin,
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unsurprising.
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The ancient worlds,
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they are lost,
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rotting between fire and ice.
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You read it in the books,
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in lyceums in the stars.
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But absent god you are
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of regions
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where mounting freedom comes with cost.
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You're paralyzed;
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time has always felt divine.
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But, mortal, time does nothing
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but grow old and
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melt with age.
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And ivy, like creeping sentries,
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weep
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and storm
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this untidy, opposite planet.
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The sun that sets
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is a black hole
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as it eats away
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at the calendar of days.
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We claw and gasp, we grasp at winds
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that wither
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and release.
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You’re weeping now
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in cadence
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with the chimes of wrecking sea,
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with waves that flicker vast and nigh
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and curl into another
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fallen world.
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6 May 08

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-- this has some rhythmic qualities that gather us to your fell Dream of times imminent moment hurtling all to the ends of infinity -- if you travel half way through infinity, infinity still lies before you -- if you live long enough and you see Countries and People become their opposites as duality seems to play that way -- freedom from freedom is the Truth and the Beauty is anyways -- most folks assume the arrow of Time and Evolution to be the same direction -- often that is not the case with man and his eternal recurrences --
 — AlchemiA

I really like this poem. The topic you chose to write about has a lot in common with most of the topics I write about. Things that concern me, the world falling apart, wanting change. Check them out.

My critique: a solid 9 :)
 — Dreamer89

Lovely moves.
 — themolly

DREAMER89:

I'll get right on that. Thanks.
 — theshattered

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