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STALKING PUPS ON THE WILD PENDULUM
fractalcore

when
 1
            all
 2
            ellipses      coincide
 3
  they     look     exactly
 4
               like
 5
             this
 6
                . . .
 7




written 13 May 08 3:32AM
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thanks again, chuckle_s.
thanks, too, mr. itzhak bentov
and mr. umberto eco.

13 May 08

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very nice and simple; everything can be retraced back to a matrix; thank you for reminding us of the wild pendulums.
Love the poem.
 — nisetru

no problem, nisetru.
thank you always for your kindness.

: )
 — fractalcore

so no one else likes . . . ?
: )
 — fractalcore

why, is this piece so ugly?

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 — fractalcore

not ugly
but it does read more like a tautology than a poem
 — unknown

really? the title is part of the piece, too, btw,
and it's telling you what ||1-7 are trying to do.

it's just like saying "i'm worth a piece of shit --
which i am -- and so are you" innocuously.

: )
 — fractalcore

and isn't it amazing how things fall into place?
other than that, synchrony is just as lovely to
observe. no ideas here; just facts.

: )
 — fractalcore

once i was stuck in the oculus
it was at the inn oculus
and life looked the same at every level
for shur i was
inocularily challenged at the time  
 — unknown

for shur you were and you shud be glad.
even when the eyes retire way before the
bones do, the veracity you observed during
your inocular disfunctionality doesn't change.

the disfunctionality might have been indeed
elsewhere -- in your mental GPS or compass
perhaps? you didn't expect to get stuck up there
but what a pleasant surprise it turned out to be,
right?

and good for you.
: )
 — fractalcore

and only occurred to me that while i was busy
going for that "all ellipses look like this..." effect
and aligning the emboldened letters there, the
piece also reads "when they concide exactly,
all ellipses look like this..."

nice coincidence.
: )
 — fractalcore

yoohoo.......



anybody home?
: )
 — fractalcore

Hey fractalcore -- yeah I saw that -- my eye always goes for the happenstance of meaning and words then have layers instead of staring with linear looks, like pompASS books or stealing your gleaning with entrapped meaning -- so I read 'when they coincide exactly all ellipses look like this' -- outside in --
 — AlchemiA

hey, Alch. how's things?

i think i've already told you you got the Eye for
things such as this. when did you learn to see
through walls like that?

thanks, man.

: )
 — fractalcore

When are you going to get the courage to write a poem that I can understand?
 — unknown

and only occurred to me that while i was busy
going for that "all ellipses look like this..." effect
and aligning the emboldened letters there, the
piece also reads "when they concide exactly,
all ellipses look like this..."

^That is what i like, more enjoyable even than the way the title governs the poem.
 — unknown

"When are you going to get the courage to write a poem that I can understand?
— unknown         &nbs p;[!]\"


hi, unknown. i get my own fair share of those "i don't
understand this poem" moments, too, which is just an
ok thing, i think. one of those poems i'm referring to
might be yours and i comfort myself in the consolation
that someday soon i will have the right mind-frame to
fit the picture in.

i really appreciate your time in reading this.

: )
 — fractalcore

last but not the least unknown, thank you so much.

: )
 — fractalcore

nice. you aren't afraid to be different. i like that.

this poem does just that.
 — listen

thank you, listen.

of course, i get scared, too.
but it's just a normal thing,
i think.

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 — fractalcore

quantoom boompfh...

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 — fractalcore

wondrous, congruent -

shivers run down the spine everytime..

a shoulder tap -

amazing!
 — unknown

psylocibin can help.
 — unknown

did u mean Psilocybin unK, er, pycho unk on Psilocybin? wtf!
 — unknown

ellipses  ♥
 — mandolyn

wondrous, congruent -

shivers run down the spine everytime..

a shoulder tap -

amazing!
 — unknown

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