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Mistress Music
grneyeddevil

A song has legs.
 1
Tiptoes across my spine.
 2
Pulls and careens me.
 3
Tongues my lobes like a lusty lover.
 4
Childhood sweets playing show and tell
 5
And leads to truth or dare.
 6
 
 
I dare you to possess me as music.
 7
It's there, raw and elusive.
 8
A song is a sight to behold!
 9
With curves as a lover's curves.
 10
Hard, as I am hard.
 11
Soft, as she is soft.
 12
 
 
One, as we are one.
 13
Sanguine and symbiotic,
 14
Skipping to the beat of my blood.
 15
I stroke her strings
 16
To fervorous frets
 17
She abides and serenades.
 18
 
 
This is what true love sounds like.
 19

15 May 08

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the first line i thought was brilliant - the rest a letdown.. it seems like your trying too hard to force the imagery. let it come at a more natural pace. holds promise.
 — adonispillow

Thanks for reading adonis. I can't say that I forced anything other than a vision of my guitar as my lover. Her name is Scarlett and she sleeps in my bed with me sometimes.
 — grneyeddevil

more shameless self promotion
 — grneyeddevil

; p
 — grneyeddevil

; )
 — grneyeddevil

: (
 — grneyeddevil

a song has seeds
planted pause
grew aloof
long and strong
fumbled fingering
lusty licks
rusty strings
and broken picks
 — unknown

You're right. I changed L17.
 — grneyeddevil

pretty nice.
|1 is like a poem
on its own.

reminds me of Fend Her Hair,
this little love affair of yours
with your axe.
: )
 — fractalcore

Ahhh yes. If only Scarlett were a real girl. She would write endless reams of bad poetry about us, paint abstracts in the nude, and wake me in the morning with incredible toe-curling sex.
 — grneyeddevil

Just to make you drool, a friend of mine has a Rickenbacker 330/12, 1983 model, in pristine condition.

L4 is missing an article adj. "I stroke her strings/to fervorous frets" isn't written correctly, I think; it doesn't make sense gramatically.

I like the concept, though.
 — Cerulise

Oooh A Rickenbacker! Very nice. Thanks for the comments Cerulise. I'll look into it.
 — grneyeddevil

wonderful
 — markfelician

Thanks Mark, I appreciate it!
 — grneyeddevil

Incredible. Bravo
 — themolly

line 4 - should read? like a lusty lover... ?

enjoyed  the parallels you are drawing here ;)
 — Gynoid

y'know I dropped the "a" in line 4 because every time I read it I heard, "shave his belly with a rusty razor..." in my head. weird, I know. i'll put the "a" back in. lol
 — grneyeddevil

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