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spring
stout

i would
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upon my
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skin
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tattoo
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life is cheap
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everywhere
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but i
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haven't
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yet
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16 May 08

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It is, and isn't at the same time, so don't.Liked this, for it's ficklenesss
 — crimsonkiss

You would tattoo life is cheap everywhere or you would tattoo "Life is Cheap," everywhere?

How does this relate to spring?  
 — Isabelle5

I wonder if you have changed your mind about this. ( the tattoo not the poem)
This is a wonderfully quirky and entertaining piece-- precisely the right size and fit.
 — banditfemme

thank you all.
not changed my mind, not really. life is cheap everywhere, don't you think. an oddly comforting thought i find, perishing without consequence.
 — stout

hmm, nice poem.
i'll never want a tattoo on my skin,
if you ask me.
: )
 — fractalcore

consider -

i would
upon my skin
tattoo


nice poem.
 — varun

why, exactly, V.? that makes it sound a little edwardian, your suggestion... you'd have to then do something like, "cheap is life, but life is set, and all is anything and stuff, i bet"... which would be a little, de trop. this kind of writing is a punk-out mod in the style of tagging, and is simply meant as ironic for ironics, spunk for punk. i don't really think it's meant to be edited, cause the author maybe thinks he's so brilliant.
 — joey

thank you Varun
 — stout

haha
believe me, tattoos, or rather the getting of them can be somewhat addictive
nice words
 — chuckle_s

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