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Tom(m)orrow, eggs will taste sour
section4

Did you happen to forget
 1
the basics of human survival;
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To eat existential energies
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or to stay away from fires,
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Release your filth of waste
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into yonder environ-mental
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as human carcass waste
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reinvigorates and potentiates
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all the possibilities of beaked
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hate as they succumb to
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mental stains of sadistic
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tendencies wrapped in
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human brains.
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I cut white meat thinking
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that days ahead could hold
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the revolution of the breaded
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breast,
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As over cooked meals revolt
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against the hired help
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and electrocuting nazis
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receive what they had dealt;
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For bloody chicken will
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avenge their sorrowed
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deep fried ends,
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And their boneless cousins will
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stand erect with elevated bends
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and decide to break the cycle of
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enslavement with revenge,
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As clucking voices claim
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the start of war beware
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the naked 3 star chef
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running hormonally bare,
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They'll shift from eating grains
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to tasting human flesh
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eventually succumbing
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to our eventual misstep
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of claiming earth as ours
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and growing hair on
 38
horned heads......
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18 May 08

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I Love You.
 — p_p_love

for gawd's sake, fix the typo in your title!
 — unknown

Very good twist on humanity.  What's up with the parenthesized "m" in "tom(m)orrow" in the title?  There's only one "m" in "tomorrow, unless it represents some kind of code?  
 — starr

It's definetly coded..........perhaps I should have written it tom-marrow......the occasional soup......just a thought
 — section4

It's my FAVORITE po(e)t!  I had no idea this was yo(u)!  Excellent!  I wanna climb inside your brain for a day.  I promise I'll b(e) qui(et.)!  :-)
 — starr

nice moves.
tasty voo-duh soop-herb
.exe cue sh'n

: )
 — fractalcore

I meant to say that this poem is "eggs-cellent."  :-)
 — starr

Thank you fractalcore and Starr for the read.
I guess you can say that I am a pun-did or better yet a drum-shtick of clucke'.....
Be my guest , jump inside but I should warn you...all my thoughts are in brackets.
Perhaps we can work on a new con-fusion-al poem to-get-her. Just a thought.
Thanks again.

Long legs the breaded breast!  
 — section4

tl;dr
 — unknown

Congrats, Section 4 on your #1 Top Rated poem.  Eggscellent (Section) 4U!  :-)
 — starr

Ha, must have missed that. Tis' Ok to have missed but informed. Thanks Starr.
The chicken (legs) are getting restless for the plucking.
 — section4

i have nothing to nit-pick. this made my day, and i will end it on high note and read nothing else. this will be printed out, hung up, and re-read. thanks you for this stuff you have been had done written.
 — onklcrispy

Hehe. I like it. It reminded me of George Orwell's Animal Farm.
Where'd you get the inspiration to right that?
 — m12327

er... write* .. ugh! that's what I get for only getting 5 hours of sleep last night! Hehe.
 — m12327

Cool.
 — CNC92

I enjoyed this thoroughly.
 — aprilkutie

I like line 31, Gordon Ramsey, v.prophetic.
 — unknown

is section 4 the looney out?
 — Liliana

awesome...great grasp and utilization of language...
 — JKWeb

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