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Ground Zero
markfelician

The Leaf fell,
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gracefully dancing,
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twirling and bending away from its branch.
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Pause.
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Frozen frame of a dying "it",
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he wondered if it has a heartbeat.
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Unpause.
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Embraced by the wind,
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it felt the chill and the sadness.
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How painful it was to part...
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and liberating at the same time.
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Impact.
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Multiple shots in different angles.
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The wind swept it off,
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and the child slowly walked away.
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20 May 08

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The leaf is me
I am the leaf
We are a leaf
and I like this.
 — mindbodysoul

thank you mindbodysoul :)
 — markfelician

: )
 — mindbodysoul

now this is neat. do away with the apostrophe in |3.
thanks for the read.
: )
 — fractalcore

done :)
 — markfelician

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