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When I Die
MattPat

I wish I could explode into a million billion trillion sensational peaces,
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And walk on the razor edges of each double-bladed sward,
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Eat every meal that anyone ever ate, and taste every memory, bitter and sweet,
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Delicious and disgusting, and realize that each side helps to measure the other.
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I don't want to live my life; I want everyone else's life,
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I want to feel the skin of the most beautiful girl, and understand her love
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By seeing her man through her eyes, and appreciate it at the same time through his eyes.
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And I want to know the sorrow of a farmer in India, or a mother in Africa,
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Watching the land dying, and children withering away like the life of the world.
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When I die, I hope I explode into a million billion trillion sensational peaces,
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And see every home for the first sentimental time, feel every love for the first and best time.
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When I die, I hope I get to see the end, and beginning of a life. I hope I feel happy
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As a mother seeing her child for the first time, and the child when his cries are abated, instinctively comforted by the sound of his mothers voice.
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27 May 08

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powerful!
great thoughts. very passionate and original writing.
just one thing = remove 'sensational' from the last line.
thanks for posting.
 — trochee

Thank you trochee, dont know how long ago you posted that, but I appreciate the words of encouragement.
 — MattPat

And your excellent criticism.
 — MattPat

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