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Arse N' All

my job is too shit tea for my taste --
eye add mire: the fountain - head
be-low - spews what is
meant to be
on this
deny smell

the shoulder stand is a highly-recommended exercise with the fish pose executed right after it, half as lengthy, to complete the regimen.

but i'm always lazy so i just wrote about it -- i mean, me, doing it in this piece.

written 05/24/08
thanks, Alex1991.

30 May 08

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hi, nisetru.
thank yo so much for the fave.
ever tried the shoulder stand?
: )
 — fractalcore

i see why it's a favorite. this is good.
 — listen

thank you, listen.
you're very kind.
: )
 — fractalcore

hmm, i wonder why only that?
thanks for the visit, DeformedLion.
: )
 — fractalcore

i am not sure if i have ever done the shoulder stand. unless i have heard of it under a different name. why have your spelt arse the british way?
 — raskolniikov

ah, your arsenal is a witty structure indeed.
 — banditfemme

my fave was the Scorpion -- I could touch my toes to my head in that one -- strength and flex-ability -- now I get down with SuryaNamskars and the Sun comes up -- changes the breath too -- the dead mans pose is another one that changes the attitude and breath -- if you can do nothing well, you can do anything
 — AlchemiA


how's things, man?
i don't know how else they call the posture but it's a good
alternative to the head stand. i was going for ARSEnal, hence
the spelling. plus the title of the poem that brought this about
is Ars Poetica.


thanks, that's very kind of you.


how's things?
the Scorpion is also one of my faves but i'm still working
on touching my toes to the top of my head and i'm working
on my Tortoise as well...when i have the time, that is. yeah,
the dead man's pose is pretty much what i've perfected
so far, hehe. sometimes i opt to do nothing 'coz i can't do

thanks for the visit.

: )
 — fractalcore

Ours Sin All
(Y)our sheit (B)lesses Us All
B(last) Fem(me)
SickO Fan Tics Me Off
I tHIMk (Y)our
Ma Cup of SHEIT.
 — PrudIsDaWay

good to hear that, PrudIsDaWay dude.
sometimes great shit happens.
: )
 — fractalcore

obviously someone is stalking fractalcore. I'd love to see PrudIsDaWay 's poetry. It's like the account was created for shadowing fractal. Whoever that is you should seriously grow up.

By the way, good shite!
 — unknown

Lord, can you ever just write plain?  

Last time I did the shoulder stand, I was pregnant, I threw up after.  Never again, just not worth it.
 — Isabelle5

who said that writing plain is the way to go?
 — unknown

1st unknown:

i think PrudIsDaWay is cool, don't worry.
thank you for stopping by and for the kind words.
: )
 — fractalcore


so nice of you to stop by.
sorry, i can't help but be myself and i wish i could
consider your request. i try to make my writing as
simple as i can but...

i'm working on it and thanks.
: )
 — fractalcore

2nd unknown:

thanks for stopping by. are you the 1st unknown?
you got a good stand there, i must say.
: )
 — fractalcore

sigh - I'm working on understanding poetry not written in my own comfortable style.  Don't change for anyone.
 — Isabelle5

LOL!!!  P.U.!  Very cute!  You're always so full of fun little ditties like this one!  :-)
 — starr


well, that's basically the point i'm making.
thank you for taking the time.

maybe you/me should try the shoulder stand again.
: )
 — fractalcore


thank you, sir.
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 — fractalcore

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 — fractalcore

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 — fractalcore

low tsk position poem
fall back deft ended
middlesex shot ill eagle

gun errs ghoul all-owed
ode payola possible
 — unknown

that's a nice piece, unk.
thanks for dropping
the bomb

; )
 — fractalcore

sure this is nice piece fractalcore. but i guess it's not meant for writing.
 — softyetharsh