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the benign inertia of a paperclip
unknown

if something is not quantifiable
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does it exist?
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if so
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in what way does it exist?
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for instance
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how is a paperclip
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different from god?
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a paperclip is matter
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in time and space
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subject to
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the principle of sufficient reason.
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god is an idea
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a consequent
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of our natural tendency
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to infer cause from effect
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god is not quantifiable
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by any empirical method
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he exists solely
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as an idea in our minds
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a theoretical progenitor who has led to
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the senseless slaughter
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of millions and the
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persecution of millions more
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a theoretical progenitor who held back
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advancements in science and medicine
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for centuries.
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so this paperclip
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which is very real
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has killed nobody
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but this idea
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this metaphysical phantasm
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has promulgated genocide
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fear
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and irrational shame
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over our natural impulses.
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i used to waste
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my time
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trying to
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de-proselytize the jehovah's
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when they
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knocked on
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my door
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but i finally learned
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the theoretical progenitor
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is an incurable cancer
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in those
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afflicted
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so now i just shake their hands
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tell them
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thanks gentleman
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but i'm the pastor of the benevolent
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church of the benign inertia
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of the paperclip.
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have a good day.
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31 May 08

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amazing ending
I think we are all god, all that exists, seen and unseen.
 — nisetru

nice concept but check your premise.
Gawd is the paperclip in quantifiable form and
You are [the] Idea - or substance - manifested
in [this] writing. perhaps the Truth is too innocuous
or be-nine a kit-ten to bother with or take no-tease of.
and isn't Gawd a natural phenomenon which doesn't
have to prove Itself right or wrong?

i like the amount of "truth" in this and the manner
it is delivered for a certain audience.

have a good day.
: )
 — fractalcore

btw, hi DeformedLion and nisetru.
: )
 — fractalcore

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