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snakes don't laugh
unknown

Wit squeezes through body
 1
orifices left open for purposes
 2
intended and newly discovered
 3
as I turn into a personal actor;
 4
a simple minded charlie-chap.
 5
 
 
Wiggle me mustache
 6
and down with me
 7
for you; I shall dwell
 8
into books of old and
 9
follow all my replies
 10
with a smirk for your
 11
eyes---
 12
sighs are what I yearn.
 13
 
 
Look at my words wrap
 14
me like a mother's bosom
 15
hiding intended goo-goos
 16
into mmmbs, suck suck.
 17
Sheltered by the
 18
occasional joke a duel is
 19
ignited and all sentences
 20
deservedly receive
 21
the perfect giggle hee hee
 22
and shoot shite answer.
 23
 
 
Tried so long to be
 24
he who makes her
 25
smile and in the end
 26
she goes for he who
 27
makes her ride
 28
abused motorcycle
 29
as I joke around with mine...
 30

2 Jun 08

Rated 9 (8.6) by 2 users.
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Comments:

snissss, snissss, snisssss!!
 — joey

!! sssssssins, ssssssins, sssssssssins
 — moah384

essessessessessessessssssss
: )
 — fractalcore

ssssssssss(th)ankssssssssssssssssss
 — moah384

Thisssssssssss issssssssssss ssssssssssssssssuper.
 — Thirteen

wow,i think u must be one who lost a snake,with nothing to eneter a cave.
 — unknown

nice.

line six is great. good voice as well.
 — listen

Thanks deformedLion and listen, I'm glad you liked it.
 — moah384

NO ONE'S EVER DONE THIS BEFORE.
 — unknown

A really good title would have been 'Snakes don't arm wrestle'
 — propoet50

as in, "snakes can't type".
 — joey

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