poetry critical

online poetry workshop

Potential Energy Is Inversely Proportional To Kinetic Energy aka THE PHYSICS OF FALLING HAIR

i realize that the eyes grow
annual rings, too, but age most likely shows
at how nearer the edge of your hair gets
to the ground, as you stand erect
to a fixed height any moment
after puberty --

written 05/29/08

thanks, midare.
happy birthday on June 20th in advance.

to AlchemiA, too, on June 21st;

to joey on i'm not sure which day
(turns out to be June 24th);

and to countless others born --
and wed -- in June.

     /   \
: )

3 Jun 08

Rated 8.5 (9.5) by 2 users.
Active (2): 7
Inactive (4): 9, 9, 10, 10, 10

(define the words in this poem)
(205 more poems by this author)

(2 users consider this poem a favorite)

Add A Comment:
Enter the following text to post as unknown: captcha


nice title ;)

well worded observation..
 — Mongrol

I love this.....
This has got to be the most original bit of writing I've seen in a while.
 — Thirteen


very kind of you, man.
thank you so much.


i bet they do. did you write
a poem about it?


oh that's very kind.
thank you so much for reading.

: )
 — fractalcore

Big Sun Day is June 21st which is my B'day the Solstice - big soul day - the two laws which grin are the law of falling short and the law of catching up -- when I read your stuff I grin from mid air and laugh tumbling down to earthen rumbles about our being mud brothers -- I've caught up to the edge of near sightedness whirling a'Dervishing vanishing in AWE -- write on fractaliscious
 — AlchemiA

happy birthday in advance, AlchemiA.
and to joey as well, i believe.

and to the countless others born in June.

[and, incidentally, to the brides and grooms
for whom countless earthly rebirths will start.]
: )
 — fractalcore

you have a really enjoyable sense of humor that i love encountering. we need spirits like that in the world. i'm really glad you have that.

this poem has that. but, it doesn't mean your seriousness for poetry, and extracting quality, isn't there. which it is.

such a nice, positive dualism.
 — listen

thank you so much, listen.
i never thought i had any sense of humor
as i view myself as a very serious guy and
you say it's there. it's the optic annual rings,
i think, hehe. thanks again for the very kind
: )
 — fractalcore

bumpster me, hehe.
: )
 — fractalcore


 — stackpop

thank you, stackpop.
: )
 — fractalcore

hello, PC.
; )
 — fractalcore

happy belated, ewe guys.
; )
 — fractalcore

it's midare's big day on
the 20th of june.
; )
 — fractalcore

birthday happy burp, AlchemiA.
; )
 — fractalcore

ahh, yer a sweetie, thanks fractalisciousness
 — AlchemiA

nicely done. a true write. real.
 — psychofemale

ey Alc,

how goes eat?
hope mike's not too busy
putting tug-ether that book
he's giving to his cancer-stricken
friend as a gift.

party hard, dued.
long live, both of you...
and the rest.


    /    \
      ; )
 — fractalcore


you're very kind as usual.
thanks for reading.

; )
 — fractalcore

Stars are always high and let you look it up. But if you can shine you can become star. And the light comes from replica designer handbags because everyone can have it. 2012 Miu Miu brand offer new models which look more maturate and beautiful. Cheap replica designer handbags attracted the attention of many female friends, to meet their pursuit of luxury for them, while also saving a lot of expenses.
http://www.copyluxury.biz< br /> http://www.replicaha ndbags-uk.co.uk
http://www.replicawatches.c o
http://www.tagheuerwatche s.biz
 — hehandbags