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Love doesn't cure IV Injections of hate.
SDreamer

Store bought soul-
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black, like
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freshly mined coal;
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burns to comfort
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the devil in chains,
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soothed by evil flowing
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as tar through his veins-
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collapsing under the weight
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of a fools tendency to hate.
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Try to save me motherfuckers,
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but I tell you, it's too fucking late-
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unless you like to emotionally masturbate.
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Don't try to bond with me,
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because, trust me, we do NOT relate.
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Everything good about you or me
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is something that one should sedate
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into oblivion; who said we had decisions?
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All I got is blood dripping visions
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of you leaving me the fuck alone.
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Woman, your love isn't like water
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flowing over my heart-shaped stone,
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just air, nitrous filled with laughter.
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And no, slut, I certainly don't like your brother.
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Don't dance, there's no chance
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of my cock rising to the occasion-
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but I just might be inspired to
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flash silver and make the fatal incision
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deep into you 'n turn your face blue.
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6 Jun 08

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Very dark and angry writing.  The vision of a man better left, speedily.
 — Isabelle5

Being ashamed of who I am is a juvenile stupidity which I no longer indulge in. About whether you're joking or not? Am I supposedly psychic? I care little either way, it's irrelevant.
 — SDreamer

Dark, sinister, angry. I like it.
 — Porcelain_Lo

nice.
: )
 — fractalcore

Thank you folks for your comments. Happy that for the most part, yall enjoyed my sinister disposition.
 — SDreamer

I like it. nice =)
 — amanda4983

I was seriolusy at DefCon 5 until I saw this post.
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ooh nasty shit. likey.

i agree with Isabelle5

thanks

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