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The people who arnt so perfect all the time...
pumpkinfetch

ummm...i really did write this, and i dont want anyone to steal it and try to publish it, and by the way IT HAS BEEN COPYRIGHTED! if u can comment on this site, please do! i would like to no your thoughts, and the title of this is Dont.. very simple! thanks for readin it

Dont be afarid to do your own thing
 1
dont be afarid of what other people think
 2
dont do something that you dont want to
 3
dont please people who dont want you
 4
dont try to be something you arnt,
 5
dont run away when everythings gone,
 6
because it will be back before you know it
 7
talk to people dont hold it in,
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when you talk you will feel better when you have accomplished it
 9
dont follow the others
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dont do drugs or anything else on that list
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just do what you know is right
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and keep your friends and family in sight
 13
only you know you
 14
and only you can tell who that really is
 15
dont try to hide it
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because other people can see right through it
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when you look away from them,
 18
they wonder what your doing,
 19
but they just dont want you to bug them
 20
make sure that your the best you can be
 21
and have a few good friends along the way to help you accomplish good deeds
 22
never look back and regret
 23
because you cant go back in time and change that
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dont be afarid of what other people think
 25
dont be afarid to do your own thing
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just because someone dont want you
 27
donset that someone dont love you
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10 Jun 08

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aw, this'd be so good in AARP. you should let everybody rip it off, cause geniuses belong to the world.
 — joey

What the hell is this?  You can't spell, can you read?
 — Isabelle5

isabelle.......O MY GOD. doesnt anyone use the shorter version of words anymore? GOD I HATE YOU FREKIN people who spaz at me for doing that. thanks joey!
 — pumpkinfetch

Sweetie, this isn't test messaging.  In Poetry, as in any craft, the details are important.  Imagine an Academy Awards dress without the lovely embellishments.

Don't hate the commenter, it's your job to make your poem as good as you can make it.  

The point hidden in this is good.  Line 21 is what I'm telling you about this poem.

You obviously know how to put the words together, you've done 28 lines of it.  Now the fun begins, the revising.  
 — Isabelle5

dis rawks hard in woe-tear.
tanks, pump-keen-pitch.
: )
 — fractalcore

isabelle i hate you.. anyway.. wats with the stupid simile thing "Imagine an Academy Awards dress without the lovely embellishments." that was stupid.
 — pumpkinfetch

this joke isn't funny anymore.
 — flourides

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