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A-bra Cad-a-bra
section4

I tongue twist tender project-shun
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of a hollow hole meant for
 2
the bite-in, not for the fight-in,
 3
Let me abra-cadabra my way
 4
into your heart by the mention
 5
of pro-fan-witty as I hand gesture
 6
my love with the wrong finger
 7
into your soul; black spots best
 8
left unwise as to why your
 9
cries mean less today than
 10
yes; Tess-Day....( a mistake).
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She lies that Sin-co-mated
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beats lead to the conclusion
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that event-duality was a
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certain-tea served cold
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to taste buds honed on
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rapid fire; as the we
 17
became I on nights
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and her on others.
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Realized that the dictionary
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holds hidden meanings for
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those who wait to see
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the light while staring at
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letters without glasses
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as I freak out inside of you,
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And Behold!
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Marriage spelt correctly
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spells the mirage that has
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become our late night
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escape-ads and my
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early morning hang-over
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her.
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I guess it's love.
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11 Jun 08

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open to public interpretation
 — section4

Wow
 — themolly

That was pretty sick :) I like it a lot.
 — technomancer

You've really put your finger on something here
 — unknown

section4/fractalbore
 — unknown

Thank you molly and technomancer and first unknown.

As for the second unknown, I am honored that you thought I was fractalcore ( I love his style and he is a great poet). Sadly I am nothing more than simple section4; an entity on my own.....sorry I bored you.
 — section4

i love this, good job.
 — JL

Thanks JL.
 — section4

very slick
 — Thirteen

thanks thirteen.
 — section4

hi, section4.

very nice moves here which i'd say very much your own but i can
somehow see myself there, too. a person can only be himself in what-
ever he does or he'll be crappy like the fruits of his labor. only you can
do a piece like this.

but emulation?
i guess it's the highest form of compliment.

hope you stay healthy, honest and fair in the PC arena.
: )
 — fractalcore

...i'd say are* very much you own...
: )
 — fractalcore

Hey fractalcore,
You can say that I learned from the best. Hope you don't mind me borrowing techniques and stuff, this is a wicked style and I absolutely love it.
Keep up th good work.
Thanks for reading.
 — section4

no problem really. what i was trying to tell you
was that you're developing your own style even
if it has similarities with the one you're emulating.
thank you for your appreciation.
: )
 — fractalcore

and i must add that you should read the works of
the old poets here or the ones mentioned in AN
HE-MALE KING DAMN[ED]. they can give you a lot
of inspiration, too.
: )
 — fractalcore

ABCD...
fractalcore

All this is who-what?
Better be good or i will
Call the autorities
Dead meat ones, twice, thrice

Even
Four times

Gawdamnit!

Hate
Is
Just
Killing
Lots of
Men
Not to mention we-men
Over a short
Pukin' Period of
Quintissential
Rudeness --

Shall we all
Talk not just to be nice but with
Utmost care and understanding too?

Veer a-
Way from
X-plicit childishness; end the
Youth-is-lost-in-me-and-i-can't-be-a-child-other-than-childish
Zeal.

5, 6, 7, 8, 9
zero into it,
us, you, and i.


written 06/15/08
t6hank you so much, section4.
: )
 — fractalcore

quintessential*

sorry.
: )
 — fractalcore

You're welcome fc.

Veer a-
Way from
X-plicit childishness; end the
Youth-is-lost-in-me-and-i-can't-be-a-child-other-than-childish
Zeal.

That's what I'm talkin' about. Good stuff.
 — section4

should be the case, huh?
: )
 — fractalcore

Love it.
 — wasp

wonderful poem

thanks

Funes
 — unknown

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