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Whiny the Pooh Breaks the Glass Box
fractalcore

ooh, the masses know it --
 1
all the meek remarks
 2
and lazy lip-syncs
 3
bleached by pistachios
 4
or the variety of fries;
 5
the amorous chances
 6
of robust wiles of
 7
coyote fingers
 8
annoy 'em --
 9
 
 
golden tongue and verdant palms
 10
the Pooh has, does [k]now;
 11
bearable hugs -- they,
 12
locked within:
 13
hunney supine.
 14
 
 
bear aware, secrets mangled
 15
amongst themselves.
 16





written 06/01/08
http://poetrycritical.net/read/48720/
thanks, trochee.

title revised 06/13/08
thanks, listen.

13 Jun 08

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ok, the glass is broken.
: )
 — fractalcore

hi, listen. i think this is the time that the limiting box
is written about.

thanks.
: )
 — fractalcore

now did somebody devoice you, listen?
i'd like to hear your opinion on this one.
thanks.
: )
 — fractalcore

thanks, DeformedLion.
am i being absurd with this piece?
you've read trochee's poem that inspired this, right?
: )
 — fractalcore

thanks again, DL.

hope to hear from you, liste.
: )
 — fractalcore

er listen
: )
 — fractalcore

hi listen, i need your opinion on this.
is it the kind of box you had in mind?
though this is not really a concrete
shape poem. thanks.
: )
 — fractalcore

i love it Fractalcore. i think this works out really well. line fifteen really incorporates your theme really well, also some nice word manipulation.

sorry about the delayed response, it wasn't because i was ignoring the piece.

however, you leave me in humorous pieces with that last stanza. i hope more people read this.
 — listen

well, i hope they do and i'm sure a lot of them already did.
i mean, i welcome all sorts of comments. hey, i'm not perfect.
: )
 — fractalcore

thank you so much for your comments, listen.
: )
 — fractalcore

:) me likey
 — markfelician

thank you so much, markfelician.
: )
 — fractalcore

now where are the cukk-tie-fixated guys when
you need them?
: )
 — fractalcore

finger fractaLiscious good -- golden'd tongue in cheek -- big bearABLE hugs
 — AlchemiA

did u know old whiney is from my home town? whineyPeg -- whinny the poo was invented from Winnipeg
 — AlchemiA

i saw that commercial paid for by the government detailing the naissance d'idee milne
 — unknown

hi, AlchemiA. yes, i think that the Pooh was
invented from Winnipeg. thanks for stopping by.
; )
 — fractalcore

unk, i haven't seen that commercial but thanks for
reading.
: )
 — fractalcore

hm, really neat fract.
i thought of "bare aware" but it may not make the right sense.
funny though.
nice one.
 — unknown

well, bear knows, hence bear aware.
thanks, unk.
: )
 — fractalcore

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