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Now, look at that clique
Do you really want to be the start of it?
They judge you on and on
But you still tag along.
They're using you
When they're done... They're gonna spit on your shoe
But don’t come running back to me
When you finally see what I see.

20 Jun 08

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 — heytherestep

well, life is a food chain, ain't it?
not bad for a first poem.

you're entitled to another post.
: )
 — fractalcore

oh and you got a nice username.
don't hide 'coz you already blew your cover.
: )
 — fractalcore

Mammillaria, Melocactus, and Opuntia
 — unknown

maybe take this poem and tie it to something outside the highschool world, make it more poignant
 — unknown

 — unknown

i think poem is great
 — onyx12098

Reminds me of my first poem on this site.
Cliche topic, shallow, wording shows lack of originality.
I'd say scrap it and hold onto the emotion you feel, then try again.
 — FangzOfFire