gone be ewe
gonna be you
gunned be me
you are just
too heavy too bare
you make me
i'm made of hue[s]
what-ever you do
i do too
you and i
thanks for the inspiration, outerspace.
not that "outer" really makes a difference there.
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this is fracreation, i love the title!
thank you, marfelician.
Your style is pretty firmly etched out, isn't it? I could definitely tell right away this was a FC piece, as well. But let me answer that writing by writing you this!
going baa, you
groaned by you
gowned by me
makes me you
i'm made [con]fused
what tether you
do tether me 2
you and eyes
It's very difficult to emulate FC.
that's a pretty nice response, Cerulise.
you can actually fine-tune it a little according
to your inner voice and you can make yourself
visible in your writing.
it's hard for me to emulate myself, too, at times.
thank you so much for reading.
will have to check one of yours.
and, um, you'll have to meet our dear outerspace
one of these days.
i'm sure you'll like him.
its ok. not my fav
pumpkinfetch, thanks for stopping by.
you know, you missed out on a lot of
pumpkins here but that's ok.
hey outaSpace went outta here -- just 'feel' your way around with the sound, inwards out without a doubt, 'til it's real -- this has some great lines, like 'i'm made of hue[s]' and the Hu in human is the reverb sound all around, that frequency ride we do when made of hue[s] -- there is a sound that rings true inside me and Hue[s] -- the last strophe is the beloved all over and ever more again
yep, let the Om take you on a trip
but don't move either lip.
thanks for the compliments and complements,
AlchemiA aka AphroDite.
i wonder where outerspace is now.
yoohoo, dued... how do you like my tribute?
read this more than once, and i must say, you have employed your tactic of word manipulation very nicely. and you have a touch of well-thought humor.
know what, i notice that the more serious i am with the
message i'm trying to convey, the funnier it strikes some
people like you. well, it just simply shows your very good
sense of humor then. i only lay little emphasis on the
comic side of things, yaknow.
but what the heck, it's funny if it's funny.
funny might be the wrong interpretation; the seriousness behind your craft is definitely there.
i just meant, sometimes your puns strike me as clever, and sometimes you can't help but smile at that cleverness.
that's all i meant. i don't deny the strength behind your words.
why thank you.
i sometimes think "peeter pun" would suit
me better as a moniker.
what do you think?
no, Fractalcore fits your name better.
that's just me, though.
ok, i like it very much, too.
pls keep those gems coming, ok?
got to sleep now.
please do the same. i like your poetry. the originality.
well, it's just me talking-writing in my writing, listen.
and i've got a lot more to learn from you guys.
Sick O Fan Tics Me Off
Hey Frackie Baby,
I wrote a piece full of wit and sarcasm.
wRIGHT in Dis section. Fuckin Stupid site.
Logged me off. It was Lost.
Just like my kids running down some girls leg.
What the Fuck! It was my best Peace yet.
Don't woreE I can and will wRITE a TRYbute.
Fuck...Sheit... I gotta .... sleep..
ey, dude. that's pretty bad.
remember to not forget about the art of
copy-paste next time, ok?
can't wait to see your first post.
thanks for stopping by.