| The Hourglass is a Great Metaphor
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technomancer
| It's a simplification, really | 1 |
But if I have my way, | 2 |
your grain will fall first | 3 |
and mine will stay. | 4 |
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3 Jul 08 |
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nice metaphor of the grain :)
noticeable is the 'if' there.
— nisetru
nice poem.
thanks for your comment on my hourglass poem.
here's a few suggests -
a simplification but if
i have my way your
grain will fall flat mine
will stay.
— unknown
flat?
— technomancer
HOUR IS A GREAT METAGLASS
fractalcore
10 REM fractals and glass sculptures
20 cls; input "what's your name?"; U$
30 for X = 1 to ∞
40 cls; ? "...you are reality amplified @ the sun's core, "; U$;"..."
50 next X
60 ? "what's your name again?"
— fractalcore
make that
HOUR IS A GREAT METAGLASS
fractalcore
10 REM fractals and glass sculptures
20 cls; input "what's your name?"; U$
30 for X = 1 to ∞
40 cls; ? "...you are reality amplified @ the sun's core, "; U$;"..."
50 next X
60 ? "what's your name again? : )"
written 07/05/08
http://poetrycritic al.net/read/49461/
thanks, technomancer.
: )
— fractalcore
I am suspended in a desert counting grains of sand that i let slip through my hands.
Larry living by numbers Lark
— larrylark
Fractalcore:
What?
Thanks for the 10 whomever :)
— technomancer
i meant
HOURS IS A GREAT METAGLASS
fractalcore
10 REM fractals and glass sculptures
20 cls; input "what's your name? "U$
30 for X = 1 until keypressed
40 ? "...you are reality amplified @ the sun's core, "; U$;"... ";
50 next X
60 input ? "what's your name again? : )"
written 07/05/08
http://poetrycritic al.net/read/49461/
thanks, technomancer.
: )
— fractalcore
I lol'd
— Aziel
pls ignore the "input" in line 60.
hi, technomancer and Aziel.
: )
— fractalcore
i like this one best!
— jenakajoffer
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