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I will finish you
bunjie

though pinkish hands unsheathed me
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and parted each silk curtain
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to gaze on my seclusion
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he could but only gasp.
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For there, between each flexing breath:
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an empty hole, unnatural.
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though drawn into my gaping maw,
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like victor more than vanquished
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he spat his words from draining lips
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in spidery whispers:
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"I will complete you."
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forgive me, then, if sated
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on Love's sweet banquet, liquified,
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I burst at once
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and fall like rain
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into your depths,
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but I can only give as got:
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I will finish you.
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6 Jul 08

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Vagina poem go!

Not bad at all.
 — technomancer

i will-fully finish ewe.
: )
 — fractalcore

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