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We the Living
rambo

To pull so voraciously apart the threads of existence—this love
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The testament thus far to the gift of life,
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And blaspheme with every breath for some comfort in destruction
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(Some witty innuendo to dare God’s stare)
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Stands as the smug bastion of those who’ve never lived in death.
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As whimpering of a soul not yet reveled by substance,
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Could ever endure the pangs of those who tread the fringe.
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Imagine—
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A life with no obsession,
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Listless and bitter as those left behind
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Who shudder at the shadows of the arms of their widows—
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not afraid,
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not humbled,
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indifferent—
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We The Living
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have no tangible memento to ease the pangs of want
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Only waiting with promises,
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With the cordial grace of that sublime face,
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Shining kindly still— with no celestial receipt
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The promise—
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A synergy of that energy we call the soul
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So brazen beyond fear
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So exponentially vivacious— transcendent of all
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There is no end to that which never began
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but has remained a singularity over the ages
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No ejaculation of passion or warm ember of dying hearts
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Knows of such a kingdom in which we live,
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We too refuse heaven,
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for a Kingdom of our own
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beyond judgment—
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Of light blinding white as supernovas blossom at our feet.
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Now,
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Then,
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Forevermore—
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As it has always been this cosmic vibration—this love
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Recycled ad infinitum
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A tyrant no doubt in the weakness to bend
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To cower in awe of the gift of choice—
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Until the expanse of questions renders you senile
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and the sanctity of truth dries your lust
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we the living can do only that
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and will continue—
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together.
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8 Jul 08

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maybe an edit after a few weeks -- there's a lot of gratuitous smartstuff sprinkled in this story and it distracts from the tedium -- in fact, keep the smartstuff and cut out the "feeling" part. didn't tennyson submit this one to cosmo already? i don't think they printed it.
 — joey

thanks man
 — rambo

nice piece and title, man.

isn't that one of ayn rand's works?
: )
 — fractalcore

Another Cosmo and not printed, Joey?  Come on, think up a new dig, you've used that one today already!
 — unknown

yea one of my favorite books, i wrote this after reading jack gilbert
 — rambo

cool. i think i've read it a long time ago. what other rand
writings do you have?
: )
 — fractalcore

all of them i think
 — rambo

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