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i need a girl
fried2noodle

who will let me do what I want with her bo-
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dy.
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+
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i love barfly's, they'll drink whatever
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I have to offer.
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+
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sometimes when I am alone
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I imagine stroking your feet.
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+
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sometimes the moon
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makes me cry.
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+
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"I am in love with you"
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echoes down the street
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my tongue,
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paralysed.
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11 Jul 08

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can't imagine lovers but that close
her hands on his knees, his eyes in her eyes.
and bodies belonging to each other as much as the souls.
i like the poem, especially the ending 4 lines
 — nisetru

"my tongue, paralysed." Sharp jagged lines, that add to the drunken discombobulation of the poem.  Lusted and slightly meniacle, almost like a serial killer stalking his next victim. "sometimes the moon makes me cry." Write on.
 — nugunz

idiots.
 — unknown

no, your the idiot.

stoopid unknown
 — unknown

Really strange atmosphere created here. Sounds like a moon dog on heat.
 — larrylark

yes, this was inspired by you mr. lark
 — unknown

you need to write on and on so i can
read more of your beauteous poems.
: )
 — fractalcore

ha.
 — fried2noodle

+++?  Make of that comment what you wish, you selfish dogg.
 — Isabelle5

vague.
 — fried2noodle

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