| WHAT WAS I THINKING? | OR SO I THINK.
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fractalcore
| me hate me. | 1 |
er, hateS. | 2 |
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erhatesetahre | 3 |
rhatesesetahr | 4 |
hateseresetah | 5 |
ateserhreseta | 6 |
teserhahreset | 7 |
eserhatahrese | 8 |
serhatetahres | 9 |
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sorry. | 10 |
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sorryrros | 11 |
orrysyrro | 12 |
rrysosyrr | 13 |
rysorosyr | 14 |
ysorrrosy | 15 |
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you hated me 'coz i ate the chess set | 16 |
i was losing bad at it when we reset | 17 |
for the ninth, er Nth, game | 18 |
hah! i missed my hat in that | 19 |
stormy, gloomy room | 20 |
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now you still hate me | 21 |
ah am sorry | 22 |
or so i think | 23 |
as i sing Sting | 24 |
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and my cheek turns | 25 |
so so rosy as you slap me | 26 |
there me thinking | 27 |
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hate is a constipated thing. | 28 |
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written 07/06/08
here @ http://poetrycritical.net/forum/post/149327/
as inspired by the poem
@ http://poetrycritical.net/read/15652/
thanks, Inuki.
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11 Jul 08 |
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so what do you think, guys?
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— fractalcore
no thoughts at all?
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— fractalcore
i actually i like it:]
you must have put a lot of effort in it . L16 is my favorite.
— unknown
always original, never disappointing.
— raskolniikov
thanks, unky.
|16 is my fave, too. no, since it's an inspired writing,
it didn't take much of an effort, only a little.
it was fun to decipher the words in the blocks and write
the thoughts down. prior to that, of course, was a more
fun moment of creating those word-blocks that spawned
the exact opposite of writer's block.
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— fractalcore
kool,
really enjoyed it from 16 onwards. i read "Sting" and i thought, why sing a sword? ha, silly me.
— DeformedLion
raskolniikov, sir.
been a long time.
thank yo so much for stopping by.
hope all's fine.
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— fractalcore
-fractalcore-
when you address me as 'sir' it makes me feel like a teacher. i went to a few british educational schools when i was young and we always had to address the male teachers as 'sir'.
i am well, thank you. although i had to cancel a working holiday yesterday due to various faults of my own and i ended up losing a couple thousand pounds because of it. so on that front, as you can imagine, i am royaly pissed off but apart from that i am happy, thank you for enquiring. how about yourself?
— raskolniikov
ey, AndrewformedLion.
thank you. message in a bottle is one of my Sting faves, yaknow.
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— fractalcore
raskolniikov, si--
as in "yes", a thousand pounds could send you reeling especially
when it's yours running away and you're losing breath chasing it
but can't stop it from getting lost/stolen.
i am well, thank Gawd, as i don't have any money to my name.
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— fractalcore
make that
HOW ARE YOU?
fractalcore
i am very
well thank Gawd
as i don't have any
money to my name
written 07/13/08
http://poetrycritic al.net/read/49611/
thanks, raskolniikov.
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— fractalcore
pleasure.
— raskolniikov
rather
HOW ARE YOU?
fractalcore
i am very
well thank Gawd
as i don't have [m]any
money to my name
written 07/13/08
http://poetrycritic al.net/read/49611/
thanks, raskolniikov.
: )
— fractalcore
I like'd Johnny Cash's rendition of Nine Inch Nails singular musical masterpiece, Hurt -- he'd lost his wife already and was a coupla months from death himself at the time -- he worked it with his country minimalism imbuing it with the human all too human misery throughout -- here you've transformed the misery of duality and it's singular madness of hate:sorry into a shaped pome that lingers at the edges of this pathetic pathos -- you've revisioned each word into echoes of prelanguage gutturals and minimalistic unclutterings -- then you break into poetry with a mission to uncover the roots of the disease of pain body duality plays rivalling the mystery of transmuting pain into the Quantum Tunnelled Cool of the Light Body -- Love flows
— AlchemiA
ooh, i love the Nine Inch Nails.
i hate writing about hate for the ninth,
er Nth time, already but it was a lot of fun.
have fun on your escapade and be safe.
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— fractalcore
This Lex sees A
Huge Bitch.
She hates U cuz of your Chest boRED
Start Over Again Match point blank.
This Fun(K) shuns all
Sue E side
I Luv Dis ride.
— PrudIsDaWay
sorry boss came by the office... I"ll work more on it when I get a chance....
— PrudIsDaWay
way to go, buddy.
looking forward to it and don't get caught
doing whatever it is you're doing.
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— fractalcore
bumpeetee day, everee-one.
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— fractalcore
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