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All Equals One
happymole

i am giving
 1
credit to no-one
 2
but myself
 3
 
 
i breathe in
 4
 
 
air comes
 5
in it enters
 6
me it becomes
 7
 
 
i breathe[d] out
 8

15 Jul 08

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hmm, very nice concept, happymole.
simple and direct.

and very nice to see you again after so
long a hiatus. i/we missed you here.

welcome back.
: )
 — fractalcore

i am giving
credit to no-one
but myself

i breathe in

air comes
in it enters
me it becomes

i breathe[d] out



hope that helps, happymole.
thanks for your poem.
: )
 — fractalcore

thanks
 — happymole

no problem but is my rewrite of your poem bad?
: )
 — fractalcore

hmm...there it is1  :)  Thanks fract!
 — happymole

now that looks better.

thanks, happymole.
; )
 — fractalcore

got any new piece?
i miss you writing.
: )
 — fractalcore

NO ONE'S EVER DONE THIS BEFORE.
 — unknown

exactly, unknown.
and everybody should read this.
: )
 — fractalcore

just revisiting...
: )
 — fractalcore

I like . "ah, the simple things in life are best".
 — syrossoul

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