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i must say that's bee-you-tea-fool
rather than annoying; me,
eye may bee thee won hoot ryes
two hard on the lard knives
in hand's wives end wives'
hands weaving hands kneading
nah-thing indie end, hard on the lard
eat ease ass grease ease ass too
imp or taunt too bee wear eat ease
eye cut my tong four my wives, meeks,
play-sure end dis pleasure end they
come plain just thee same, too what's
ever-nagging @ duh soft limp mode
of my fall ick seem-ball lickally wonting
the tong on en aft to add-dress case-says
of limping witch off-ten does huh-pen
in long-winding daze... "like dis[?]"
well, hoot ever, gag me, yeah.
eye eat meet en'am naught[y] proud.

written 07/14/2008
thanks, markfelician, netskyIam, & KurN CobaiT.

hope dis is annoying enuff.
: )

24 Jul 08

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It is annoying way more than enough.  Imagine Ezra Pound or Robert Frost writing this.  
 — Isabelle5

yes fract,
this is annoying enough.
makes my brain tense.

funny ending.
 — jenakajoffer

fract, seriously...deep breath.

 — DeformedLion

certainly not nadsat
but definitely in a different and equally amusing language. i saw the title and knew immediately who the author was.

with regards to the poem, i think lines 1 through 19 need no rewording. ;-)
 — raskolniikov

hehe, haha, gag me, yah, huh?

thanks, jenakojoffer, DeformedLion, raskolniikov!

and Isabelle5, don't i deserve a 10 then?
: )
 — fractalcore

eye mmmmm gifting yule tin.
ewe art made ness.
 — Liliana

Holy sheet!  Y cum jew right like dees?  Sealy ghoul.  
 — starr

thanks, Liliana
i'd like to read your poems.
please post them.
: )
 — fractalcore

ey ,starr.

thanks for stopping by, dude.
ghoul? interesting.
: )
 — fractalcore

i don't speak/read ebonics very well.
 — dustybottoms

? you are not a ghoul are you
 — Liliana

hi, dustybottoms.

it was not my intention to spew ebonics here but
is this how it really sounds to you? it's all meant
to annoy firstly, and then, secondly if it merits one,
to get a poem across.

thanks for stopping by.
: )
 — fractalcore

hi, Liliana.

a ghoul? well, it depends on how you define the word.
: )
 — fractalcore

in this 'ebonic spew'
which i dig

how shall i address you?
 — Liliana

I simply must ask, why would you want to use your talent to write a poem that is first of all to annoy, as you state in a comment?  That seems so wasteful of your gift.  
 — Isabelle5

Liliana, no, it's not ebonic spew, but you're
welcome to call it so if you like.
: )
 — fractalcore

Isabelle5, i supplied a link to the forum thread started by
netskyIam. that should explain why i wrote this.
: )
 — fractalcore

oh no...
i am afraid you may have taken my reply
the wrong way- i didn't mean to offend
in any way.

 — Liliana

oh no, no offense taken, Lily.
i'm kewl as eyes melting in my head --
mine own end know other.
: )
 — fractalcore

hoo else wants two gut annoyed?
: )
 — fractalcore

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 — unknown

thanks, unky.

eat ease watt it E's S [k]wat[s] issssss...
till noon when i'm temporarily relieved
of the fear i have for my shadow that
constanly reminds me of myself in others.
; )
 — fractalcore

gags* makes universal sign for choking LOL!
 — unknown

ey, thanks for the visit, unky.

; )
 — fractalcore

die die

die die
 — unknown

is that a nirvana song, unk?

: )
 — fractalcore

this was fed as random poem. too timely to strain my eyes. just so clever ;P
 — unknown

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