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addicted to sound
caustic

I don't know how to sleep without noise.
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I scroll through lists of
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songs with sloppy sentiments,
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nothing to stir me into wakefulness
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with the aim of thought.
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Sad and dull.
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Sad and dull are good, they are
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down,
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and taking a mental step down may
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help me fall into sleep.
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But I must be drunk on light because
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I fell and missed the ground,
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missed the down part of sleep,
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and my mind landed in a cocaine powder puff monstrosity.
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It is a parody of sleep that leaves me
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more tired than when I was awake.
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Someday I will find a way to get to sleep
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without noise,
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hopefully a way with fewer decoys and
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missteps, because
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pills make me loopy and my food tastes strange in the morning.
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1 Aug 08

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It has a comfortable, thinking-out-loud, read to it. Nice one.
 — lepry

good handle and control on the words and flow.
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 — fractalcore

i especially like line 11-16
 — SilverGirl

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