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Incredible Lurk

it's really nice to be in this DreamSeaLand.	1
how's your reading of the book or Rand's?	2

well, you never change, buddy.	3
you're a green dormant computer who's OK	4
till we/you blow your top and your brain	5
muscles pop away in a fit revealing your wit	6
tearing your dress apart, doing your	7

part in the dialog, or monologuing your asss...	8
...sssumptions on a well-thought day or	9
mindfullesst like the FUCKLEWIT atlas	10

rebuilding the old new world by the simplest	11
gesture of a shrug for all the fucklewit-wannabees	12
to thrive in, riding the lightning motor of [r]evolution	13

so incessantly	14
you stay/go/lurk, girl.	15

[w]i'll keep the green light on for you.	16

written 07/14/08
http://poetrycritical.net/forum/post/149660/

for OKcomputer.
thanks, buddy.
: )

3 Aug 08

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OKcomputer truly deserved a poem to be dedicated to. I like it very much, it flows nicely, has got double meaning and humor, and last line is awesome.
— nisetru

thanks so much, nisetru.
every poet deserves a poem written for them, right?
: )
— fractalcore

or him or her.
whatever.
: )
— fractalcore

this must've the wrong OKcomputer [IP] address.
shall i return it to sender?
: )
— fractalcore

i finally found it ;)
— OKcomputer

i'm glad.

so how do/did you find it?
: )
— fractalcore

very cool stuff. check line 5/6, then click on ok profile before it changes; nifty happenstance that!
— chuckle_s

thanks, chuckle_s.

yeah, i notice that, too. skull is a curious thing: why is it
even there? hmm, and do you notice her last two poems'
titles?

gun is too cliche a friend nowadays, i think.
maybe we all should try to do a hannibal on ourselves sometime.
: )
— fractalcore

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