i'm a schizo | or so i think
maybe not | i think not
shut | up
scratch | my | back
8 Aug 08
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funny poem with a funny title, interesting fact
thank you so much, nisetru.
can a dialog transpire between the same "two" people?
or a monologue perhaps?
maybe i should just shut up and scratch my back.
I do it all the time - I'll curse, then scold myself. I am not fond of the big wall in the center. I know what you're going for but there must be a better way to show that it's two sides of your brain having a chat. It's not coming across as strongly as it could but I have no idea how to strengthen the format.
thanks, Izz... Isabelle5.
how 'bout this version now?
sorry i can't get rid of the wall.
I wish you could draw a picture of a head, with voices coming out all over it!
butt ease-sent duh head well-pictured dare?
LEFT SPEAK TO RIGHT SPEAK TO LEFT SPEAK TO RIGH SPEAK TO LEFT SPEAK TO RIGHT
NOBODY SPEAK TO MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE :-(
this is such a good idea, the split dialogue. i'd love to see you use this idea again, it has worked very well here.
as is, very clever. schizy is a cool word.
schizy used to be a moniker of mine.
i'm glad the format works for you.
thank you so much, listen.
ey! was that you i heard a while ago?
oh, maybe not...
but i think it was you...
oh, never mind!
well, maybe it was me you heard
or might be your own voice.
thanks for stopping by, enkantada.
unky, trite and shite are two lobes comprising
the same thing with a thin sheet of air in between.
thanks for stopping by.
chinatown1, i dunno what to say.
maybe i do.
thanks for faving.
Would parens work better?
i'm a schizo (I think)
maybe not (not)
shut it (up)
scratch (my) back
who's that?? haha
but i guess the curent format
will stay as is for now.
who's that? (who's what?)