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777
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To marvel at the earth's landscape
 1
and say that it is beautiful
 2
is not enough.
 3
But to say that is your creation
 4
is true fascination
 5
at the highest fashion.
 6
 
 
To try to be happy
 7
and please the self
 8
can only take me so far,
 9
but to please only you
 10
removes the scars
 11
and arrogant burdens
 12
that have consumed me
 13
is my rightful place and purpose.
 14
 
 
Allah, bismillah, inshallah,
 15
yeshua, jehovah, krishna
 16
mashallah!
 17
 
 
Hare ultima, alpha, omega!
 18
 
 
My lord,
 19
I bow down to you
 20
as your unqualified servant.
 21

8 Aug 08

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absolutely beautiful poem dedicated to God - first stanza, and - to a lover - the second stanza.
 — nisetru

shite
 — unknown

absolutely beautiful, no othe rway to describe it
 — Odin

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 — Odin

This is really lovely. I love 777.
 — elysium

Beautiful prayer- I like this.
 — SilverGirl

Respectfully and tenderly written, but why not capitalize the other deities and Lord in L19 too?  
 — unknown

Hey, this sounds like a current open thread...Sounds like you don't know who to worship so you have god-soup.  You can't please them all.
 — Isabelle5

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