|LASHING OUT ON MY BROKEN RIB
all too obvious."
and thank you, themolly.
29 Aug 08
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That's cute and clever and concise! I like it. Can it be improved in small ways?
Only time can advise you on that, not me, not a first-time reader. But as it strikes
a first impression: very pleasing, good. Thanks!
thank you, reid.
almost all my posts are rather unfinished and are here for later
edits when some new idea pops up and when i'm not that pressed
with time. of course, anyone can be the first to suggest any insightful
revision and is welcome to do so.
hope everything's fine with your health and stuff.
nice one fract. cleverly written!
thank you, mark.
waste of a good title
hi, 1st unk.
i know what you mean but you just might be
missing the point of the 2nd strophe.
thanks for reading.
seems family air run through it -- your homage writes are write on
these great poets deserve the homage.
i will have one just for you, sir, 'coz
you're one of them.
eve wanted that apple
and thanks fractal
how come i'm the only one who needs help with this one? lol.
i get adam and the rib thing, but not this as a whole.
i do think quite highly of the title though.
hey frac, how's it goin'
apple for flambe, hmm...
wanna try that sometime.
ey, jen. been really busy but doing well.
always a lady behind every
but can he end she
or her, rather?
I broke 2 ribs in december... I did it from coughing so damn hard. I love Michigan winters!
thanks for dropping by, aforbing.
so how're you doing now?
hope you're as fit as a mustang again.
and Luxy, thanks for the fave.
any broken rib stories of yours?
hopefully not but
i wanna hear it